Er, not sure why he stopped cross-posting here. but anyway...

This is a character-driven story with a plot that develops around the MC. It looks like at least some of the same things could have happened without him being there, but then they would have ended worse. 

He's got goals, but they are general life goals, and the "get stronger/become immortal" goal is about living life fully, not an end unto itself. I like him, I like his "big sis" best friend, and most of the other cast. Even some of the jerks. :D

While not a Destined Chosen One, he *is* chosen to be given a chance, and to take a chance upon. Given some setup, but still the opportunity for failure. He makes plenty of mistakes, and is only OP relative to his tier/ranking. And even with his advantages, he's only slightly OP at first. Strong, but unskilled.

I do have to ding the author a little under grammar and style. The grammar is fairly straightforward, he has slightly higher-than-average typos IMO, and similar basic mistakes in punctuation. Nothing egregious, but they are there. 

Similarly, the writing starts out a little, mm, stilted I think. There is a certain flow to narration that is lacking at first, but builds over time. He's been making edits to improve his earlier chapters, but they could use some polish. 

I wish I could be more specific, but I don't know how to edit in a way that would help here. It's an overall impression, and I find it difficult to point at a specific thing. 

But in the end, both of those are minor issues and I have enjoyed every moment of catching up to the current chapter.

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Great story!  Can't wait for more chapters to be released!  Keep it up!

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Excellent slow burn! Needs moar eyeballs, and I hope we get a lot more chapters.

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