Thanks again for the feedback. As a new author, I'm always looking for ways to improve in my writing, so getting your opinion is appreciated. I had two questions for you. First, were there any other issues that you could point out with my story, characters, setting, writing, etc? Second, could you read the remaining chapters that are posted and provide feedback for those as well? Feel free to decline, but I'd love to hear your thoughts on most recent chapters. Thanks again for the feedback.