Tl;dr:
Feelin' good, but going to take a week-long break to consolidate, then back with arc 2. Expect more of what you've already read, both good and bad.
So... The first arc finished off with a bang. I guess you could call it the 'Aina arc', since it kinda focused on her most of the time, with all the R18 scenes involving her.
Unfortunately for some of you, there means we won't be getting such copious amounts of Aina x Ray in the future, but don't worry, she'll always be there.
'Does this mean arc 2 will be the 'Nika arc, then?' you might be asking, and... I've honestly got no clue. We'll definitely be seeing more of her, though.
So, anyways, first arc over. Thoughts? Mine are... positive, mostly, especially towards the end. You see, I never intended this to be a serious story, just some random, wish-fulfillment porn with plot, and I just posted the first chapters to watch people laugh at my terrible attempts at storymaking, and it was all well and good at the beginning, but then suddenly we got to top 1 on trending and... it was honestly way too much pressure. I tried to increase the story's standards to a level it was never meant to reach in the first place, but all it did was make me buckle under the pressure.
So, I took a break. I never even posted all the chapters I'd prepared. I just couldn't face the spotlight.
But now it's different. Half a year passed, and I'm looking at the story in a new light, with a new mindset. We've gotten pretty high on trending once more, but I don't plan on letting that change how I write my story.
It's merely wish-fulfillment, slightly better written porn with plot, by virtue of my writing skills inevitably increasing as I exercise them. Still, it's nothing crazy, no incredible, moving story, or with a crazy, creative premise.
And, like I said, it isn't supposed to.
So, if you like what you've read until now, stay tuned, much more of that coming up.
If you're tearing out your hair over the plot holes, inconsistencies, and grammar errors, of which there are definitely quite a few, then don't expect me to fix them all in the next chapters and suddenly turn this into a banger of a novel or anything like that.
Now, on an unrelated note, I've been eating into my backlog quite a bit lately, barely got any left at this point, so I'm going to take a week off or so to give myself some time to write and plan, and consolidate the story by giving the first 10-15 chapters a quick editing sweep, to get rid of potential inconsistencies and flesh out the story a bit. Not enough to make it worth rereading, probably, but just thought you should know.
Alright, that's all from me. See ya!
The first 25% or so wasn't all that great as I said in my review. From 25%-75%ish it was pretty decent. These latest chapters though I could easily tell that you took some mid length chapters and broke them up into tiny ones. It was very obvious. I didn't like that and honestly you would've been better off just doing longer chapters with a set schedule instead of tiny bite sized ones. I didn't even read them because of that. I just skimmed so I won't miss anything, but if it continues like that I'll probably just drop.
I've liked the story pretty much from the start
Thanks
We shall await your return
Oki, i wait, u do whatever u du
Finally caught up, enjoyed the story so far and can't wait for the next arc I will definitely read it.
Do what you want with it. It's your story and you don't need to match what anyone else thinks is right. You can always start another story if you feel the need for something that doesn't fit this one. That said, I don't mean to totally ignore your readers. Listen, it can help you find mistakes and issues, but follow your own path for your tale.
If every story always did things the 'right way' there would only be a handful of stories told by different people. People aren't perfect and neither should be most characters.
Całkiem fajnie się to czyta. Historia rozwija się. Czekam i pewnie nie tylko ja na jakieś trójkąty, czworokąty i harem pełen tych "obrzydliwie chudych kobiety "...
Just remember, that while audience feedback is great and all, don't take it as gospel because they are not writers.
Of course people are going to complain if anything bad happens to the main character, if a villain is evil, if a heroine is in peril, and if things seem hopeless.
They don't understand that for the ups to be up, the downs have to be down, and there is no climax or resolution without a problem to solve and there is no huge victory without a villain to fight.
People are impatient and want to solve the mystery in like 3 pages. That's not how writing works.
Anyway, I've really enjoyed it so far, so keep doing what you're doing. Maybe edit it for spelling a bit, but otherwise, top notch.
Thanks. The first chapters are a bit rough in other areas too though, there's no denying that. Going back will also help me set some things you better so they don't just come outta left field later or so, but I won't be changing anything mayor