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Harem <3No.Total voters: 158 · This poll was closed on Aug 28, 2022 03:08 AM.
"Oi, Asai hurry the fuck up. Unless you want more knuckle-sandwiches!"
Body covered in bruises, slowly limping down the cold, dark stone hallway. I usher myself onwards into the dark without bothering to reply to Clam's threats. Him and his goon squad did quite the number on me this time. I swear upon myself revenge if ever the chance is presented before me.
Now, I don't really believe in ghost stories. However, as I continue my lonely pilgrimage I hear noises from beyond. Wooden furniture creaking eerily. A quiet, and sorrow-filled whimper echoes against the stone walls. Fucking-hell I'm not scared of this shit am I? I peer downwards, a quick check to ensure my pants are still dry. I notice my hands shaking. The rain continues to crash against the roof. Thunder cracks. My heart races.
As I encroach upon a wooden door. Against the heavy bass of my heartbeat I hear noises. Feral noises. Deep low Grunts accompanied by the quiet whimpering. Under the cover of heavy rain, I quicken myself. Rushing into the kitchen, my eyes on the prize. I swiftly grab the last slice of apple pie and make my return.
As I return upon the door, I fall victim to my curiosity. I soldier myself closer, ignoring all the creepy as shit noises and peer through the small keyhole. As my eyes begin to adjust to the lighting. My brain barely manages to take in the information presented upon me.
There, inside. Sammy, one of the older girls who thank the lord for the eye candy, was naked, bound by rope and her mouth gagged. I believe she just reached adulthood recently? I continue peering in, watching as the older male aggressively rails her from behind. His face filled with satisfaction and ecstasy. He reaches forward to ruthlessly grope Sammy's sizeable bosom. My hero complex kicks in a little. I could return to the kitchen and obtain a knife to try save her. But, just prior to my action her gag falls out. Now free to voice herself.
"Yesss, more~ please. Uuu." Sammy continues to erotically whimper. The man's ego seemingly buffed by her moans.
"TAKE IT, TAKE IT, How do you like my holy sword?" He continues to pound her amidst grunts. "HERE IT COMES!" Wait, his body is emitting golden aura. Seriously dude? You're using skills to buff your body for this? After another grunt, the male climaxes inside her. Sammy's buxom body seemingly fatigued from the intense workout collapses onto the bed sheets. As his cock slips out, his cum gushes out of her honey pot. After a moment of post-nut clarity his eyes regain focus. He peers down and admires his artwork. A grin slowly grows upon his face. He leans in near her ears. "Do you desire another round against my holy sword?"
Sammy, upon hearing this giggles and nods her head. Her body though however remains flat on the bed, back towards the ceiling. The man, his cock still standing firm. Thanks to his buffs no doubt. He aims, and he once again impales her.
Another thunder cracks, snapping me back to my mission. Whelp, guess I best hurry back, lest I desire more beatings.
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"Well done Little Ass, I knew you could do it!" Clam and his goon squad snatches the prize out of my hand. Tch, they gobble the pie down without even offering a piece to me, the bread winner of this shithole.
"Yeah well-" Joen takes another bite before finishing. "-done Ass-boy." He throws a thumbs up towards me. I clench my teeth, sweet-baby-Jesus I swear to god once I find myself a better alternative, I'm going to fuck you guys up.
Ignoring the lot I quickly climb back into my bunk bed. However, before I slumber, I perform my nightly ritual. No, not that. Get your brain out of the gutter. Upon entering deep focus something pops up in my mind.
[Asai: Level 5]
I managed to level up it seems. Good thing even trash "go there, get me this, get me that." quests grants me experience. Although it would be nice if I would be given more information...
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Serious question. Harem or no harem?
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Good first chapter. It is a nice first introduction into the character.
However, I would suggest adding more onto your Synopsis. Perhaps explain the MMORPG that the story is based on, or the character's starting situation. Right now without a good synopsis or any reviews, I was unsure if I even wanted to start the story. The only reason why I really did was because of the amount of chapters. . Plus Rohan made me think of Lord of the Rings.
Anyway best of luck.
Thank you for the advice bro.
I'll try add a bit more information there, but I see it the same way I see chapter titles. Whenever I'm reading other author's novels, I find myself ignoring the chapter titles because of potential spoilers.
But yeah, you got me there, I'm pumping out chapters as my main selling point XD
@kophzi No problem. Personally I also suggest that author's save up about 5 chapters and release them all at once to give people a taste. What you have now is a very good amount for the reader to get into the story which is a big selling point.
Now for the synopsis you don't have to do a big plot point either. You could just describe the world a little bit and then just a quick name drop for the mc.
[After describing the world a bit] "How will Asai survive/adapt/thrive in a world of steel and spell(If magic fantasy). Sometimes writing a summary/synopsis is difficult because you don't want to spoil too much.
@KidBuu699 How about now? I think with what I've put up, it can hardly be considered a spoiler and enough of a tease right?
Voted for Harem but do have concerns just hope it’s not a pick and forget Pokémon catch them all style harem maybe limit the number of members to around 5-7 to make it manageable so they don’t feel hollow
Whoa, 500+ chaps. Time for a good binge.
Good first chapter go on I am interested.
Well I just binge read up to chapter 430 and can absolutely say that is quite enjoyable.
The quality improves after the first 100 chapters and if the tags don't scare you away it's certainly worth the read. Part of me equates this to a burger meal, maybe not the best but it certainly hits the spot from time to time.
The chapters are relatively small but usually comes in small batches so there's that and the author engages with the comments so far.
I wish the author the best and hopefully we will read more of his.
Thank you, glad you enjoyed it. Yeah, I'm actually not entirely certain if the "Death" "Depictions of Cruelty" "Sexual Abuse" should even be tags as they're elements rarely seen. But, I left them up there to be safe, so I don't end up catching readers by surprise, like a random upper-cut.
I agree with the burger analogy, because I wanted to make the dopamine hits sparse and rare, so that the feeling of reward would feel more meaningful, and not just as an element that's forced into every chapter possible etc.
The pre-100 chapters, I was actually consuming a lot of plum-soju & Disaronno for inspiration, so I'm not surprised if the reader base found those chapters to be inconsistent. And I can only apologise to those who thought it intolerable, and be wholeheartedly grateful to the readers who stuck through with me.
That's why I pledged to never put Isekai Rohan's content behind a paywall. No advanced-chapters, no hidden illustration/artwork, no side-stories locked behind patreon. Everyone gets access to all of it for free. etc
Thank you for attending my TedTalk.
kophzi
I'm more interested in what video game this was based on.
Rohan Blood Feud, an oldschool looking mmorpg where the developers one day decided to go balls to the wall deep in P2W. Selling imabalanced weapons unobtainable godly weapons in any way in game, the story mostly situates around Del Lagos, Einhoren.
@kophzi looks a lot like World of Warcraft.
I rather enjoy harems, though not if they fetishize the absolute worst traits of humanity. (I'm looking at SCOG)
I haven't personally read SCOG, but I can ensure you that there will be no NTR and personally I really enjoy wholesome moments more than forced rape.
@kophzi oh God, thanks for alleviating fears I didn't know I had.
Hi Author - I voted for no harem, but I thought your voting needed more nuance. I am 100% on board for a love triangle - the most underrated of genres.
question is the protagonist a male or female?
Dia punya penis.
Mungkin dia sejenis tanaman🤣🤣
feel like i read through retranslated web novel with that start.
not bad per say just give me those vibes.
Yeah, the beginning was rough, I cringe whenever I think about what I wrote during the first initial arc because of how exploratory I was, in seeing which elements from the JP/CN/KR novels I read that I wanted to keep etc.