In this story, a regular guy from our world becomes a young Main Branch heir of the powerful Hyuga clan in the Naruto world.
He's primarily interested in gaining more power and doesn't care about right or wrong. He uses his knowledge from Earth and the Naruto show to get ahead, using his creativity and intellect to the utmost.
As he tries to become more powerful, we see sides of the Hyuga clan and ninja world that weren't shown in the original Naruto story.
He looks into the secrets of his ancestors, the Hyuga's eyes, and how ninja politics work, finding out things we never knew before and that the original author left unexplored.
However, gradually, along the way, he also meets new lovers, friends, subordinates, and enemies and challenges how things are done in the ninja world - and also tries to unify it in the process and bring real peace around.
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* This story is not for the impatient readers; it is very slow-paced, but it speeds up gradually over time. And you can't expect much action in the first few years of the MC's life, I guess.
* Amoral and power-oriented MC. There are four female leads; two of them are full OC, but logical for the story & interesting. Maybe more in the future. Please, read the tags carefully.
* Chapters may contain some parts where my own written words and existing structure are edited by AI to improve their quality slightly.
* The story will definitely deviate from the original plot and events, mainly due to the Butterfly Effect. The timeline revolves around WW3, Kakashi's, Guy's, Asuma's, etc., generations.
* The exact relative ages of various characters are pretty convoluted and contradictory even in the original story, so don't expect me to fulfill your wishes for a 'perfect' timeline now.
* More fleshed-out, complete, logical, and realistic (dark) version of the Naruto world with depth. So, slightly AU fundamentally at my discretion. High-quality English and writing.
- 178. The White Fang’s Blade Against Uzumaki’s ChainsMay 28, 2025
- 177. The Hyuga’s Defense: When Pride Meets War (6)May 27, 2025
- 176. The Hyuga’s Defense: When Pride Meets War (5)May 26, 2025
- 175. The Hyuga’s Defense: When Pride Meets War (4)May 25, 2025
- 174. The Hyuga’s Defense: When Pride Meets War (3)May 6, 2025
- 173. The Hyuga’s Defense: When Pride Meets War (2)May 5, 2025
- 172. The Hyuga’s Defense: When Pride Meets War (1)May 4, 2025
- 171. Hinome’s Dawn: Where Science Meets DestinyMay 2, 2025
- 170. The Raid Against the Hyuga Set in Motion (3)May 1, 2025
- 169 The Raid Against the Hyuga Set in Motion (2)Apr 30, 2025
- 168. The Raid Against the Hyuga Set in Motion (1)Apr 29, 2025
- 167. Whispers of Power: Obito’s Offer to Nagato (3)Apr 28, 2025
- 166. Whispers of Power: Obito’s Offer to Nagato (2)Apr 27, 2025
- 165. Whispers of Power: Obito’s Offer to Nagato (1)Apr 23, 2025
- 164. Rain of Deceit: The Ambush Against Akatsuki (3)Apr 22, 2025
- 506 reading
- 128 plan to read
- 9 completed
- 23 paused
- 51 dropped
Mirroring what everyone has said because it's true. The writing is very good. But not too long ago I just finished a chapter that was literally nothing but exposition and inner monologue. Plot-wise, 3 days have passed by where I am now. Thousands of words for what breaks down into 3 days of narrative is crazy.
The quality once again is there. I'd go as far as to say it's great. But an editor would do the story a lot of good. Or just big cuts for the exposition. I love the details and thought put into it all, but that doesn't need to be dropped off in the beginning of the story. Expand on those Hyuga clan details as we go along. After all, I assume we'll be interacting with the clan for a majority of the run time. Those details don't even need to come out on the very first time something is done. "The familiar sensation of chakra burning its way into his eyes. Byakugan." Like that. It characterizes the technique, lets you know our character has felt it many times before and you can expand on that for multiple paragraphs if you wish. Point is it doesn't have the be your first rodeo.
I guess our protag is a little bit cold for a 3 year old in Naruto's universe. We have to measure our characters up to the canon right? Itachi, Neji, Garra, are all "cold" characters in universe but our MC, here at 3 years of age, carries their energy (or more). Emotions that he shouldn't be capable of expressing.
What I'm trying to say is, making a character shut down and become cold to the world seems like the shallow cure-all solution. When the writing is this grounded and well-done, I think it's begging for a more mature take on this type of attitude but maybe that's just me.
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A talented author but a disappointing novel so far. The plot when its there is good unfortunately its few and far between massive info dumps that read like a boring history textbook. I'm going to shelf this and wait so I can skim and binge when enough chapters come out.
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Good story, and it might do even better if the Tags actually told you about the story, and were not all about the protagonist. When you do Tags, have no more than 3 about your protagonist, just my opinion. 8/9 Tags are about the MC... Really?!
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The story has everything to be good, however, it just seems like a big dump of information and time jumps, the MC has a God syndrome and is very egocentric, the other characters seem like an NPC where when they say a few words they are kind of forgotten, honestly, it's not really worth reading if it's not to kill time
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I really did try to like this but 80 chapter's in im giving up like most of the reviews will tell you the story is well written but it's all tell there is no show and even when there is a place where there should be show it's only a paragraph at most and then it goes into a 3 plus chapter long inner dialogue mostly about how great the MC is and how special they are and absolutely everyone else is just plan stupid. Really the 140 chapter's could be condensed down to 70 or 80 add in some actual show to balance the tell and it would be alot better
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As original as a fanfic can be, at least from any I've read it's a new perspective on Naruto.
It's a good story, but the writing style I found it to be very verbose and kinda contrived.
A lot of info dumps and any one paragraph have at least two or three descriptors, synonyms etc. Almost like if there was a word count the author needs to hit at all costs, if there is a way to stretch anything it will be done.
4.5/5.0
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