Overall: This is fun, whimsical smut that is reasonably well written.

Sustain:

• Light hearted tone
• Consent is necessary, and hot
• It's not all s*x 
• Level of "game" detail, not too much but enough to be interesting
• Meta story is engaging
• s*x scenes aren't overly repetitive 
• Good grammar
• Good conversational flow

Improve:

• Scene descriptions are light at times
• Character development has kind of stalled since the beginning.
• s*x has gotten a little penis centric 

Personal preference: I really loved the initial scenes and the power exchange between A and B. I'd love more of that but understand the characters may have moved past that. 

Again, great story! Thanks for writing this. ❤️

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Don't know if you'll see this as it's been a while since this story was updated but for some reason I feel like writing a review. 

The story has been very enjoyable and the core characters have such a good chemistry with each other.

I binged most of the book in just a few days so I think I have a pretty good recollection of what happened in the previous chapters still but even so in the final battle so far it just felt like characters were pulling spells out of nowhere that just allowed them to get the main characters into impossible situations and allowed the main characters to get out of said impossible situations. It feels like I missed the world building for just how powerful these characters had become and for how powerful their enemies had become. I know it's a lot to ask as you may not be particularly interested in writing about this part but I would love some more progression info/stories about the main characters/villains. Also info for how powerful they get with each level, I don't think we've gotten any info on that since Book 1. 

Overall I really like these characters, story, and setting and wish there was more done in the way of world building to establish the power and limits of the characters in it later in the story because I don't really have a sense of the power scale of anyone anymore. A big bonus for the story is that the smut is very good and well written. 

Hope you come back to this story because it's got the bones to make it an incredible story and it's already very good.

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