Wondering through the stars
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4.6 (5 ratings)
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Synopsis
Reincarnating may not be as easy as it seems. But it also comes with its benefits: Skills, Knowledge, Prestige, and even Foresight! Alde Lenarmend finds himself in unthinkable situations while the Universe itself is changing. Will he be able to unravel the mysteries behind his numerous reincarnations? Or will he lose himself while traveling through different worlds?
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AdventureFantasyIsekaiLitRPGRomance- Chapter 4: End of the first memory recollectionMay 5, 2022
- Chapter 3: Open statusMay 5, 2022
- Chapter 2: Prison of another worldMay 5, 2022
- Chapter 1: Kidnapped?May 5, 2022
- Epilogue V3May 5, 2022
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Hiatus - Updated May 5, 2022
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<This review is meant as a constructive critic towards improvement.>
"Who else are we talking about if not dear brother?" says the boy with a smile blooming on his face. Lack of capitalization and wrong verb tense. ->Said, or even, 'The boy said with a smile...'As he sees me with my open mouth, he adds: ->He added after seeing me with my mouth open, " asfas."Ch3: *Name:??? ???*
*Lv: ???*
What's this all about? Have I gone insane? Is this a system? [This is an example of the MC either speaking of thinking, thus use either " or '. Otherwise, the reader will run into a ??? situation.
"Splash" (Sound effect??? The MC said splash?????) I heard a splashing sounding echoing deeply into my eardrums. (an example to clear things out.)
Overall: Typos here and there, misuse of punctuation. Mixed tenses throughout entire chapters, and then at the end it changes without proper breaking of pov swapping, thus it is not intentional. Lack of dialogue quotations, one does not know when the MC is speaking. At first glance looks like the narrator, yet there are sentences that indicate the opposite. 3.5*
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The idea is that the MC jumps from world to world when he dies. He did try to get back to Earth during the epilogue, which is also the first chapter, but he failed. I think. The idea itself is very good. There is a lot of potential for exploring the worlds where the MC lands and his journey to become stronger and not jump around. It is a fresh take on the isekai troupe.
The style is good, but the grammar needs a lot of work. Still, I doubt that English is the author's mother tongue, so I am being linient with my rating here and just giving a five star because the story is engaging and has potential. I am sure it will shine after an editor, or a grammar checker, is used to polish it.
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Good idea, but pacing is a bit eh, and the grammar is pretty bad, if you work on those this would probably be a solid 4.4
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