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Legit nothing has happened yet but I'm writing this review to give the Author some advice. This is starting to look interesting and could be a very good fanfiction as long you don't do these things:
1. Don't add in that ecchi p*rn with plot BS that every other horny immature authors add to their DxD stories. Just because the source is about some perverted harem kid doesn't mean you have to follow the same formula when making the fanfiction. DxD actually has a very big and decent world that authors can use for some original story if they bother to even try.
2. Like I said above, DxD has lots of material and world building you can use to make your own story in the same world. Don't have the character follow the main cast and story like some puppy. Every action has an equal and opposite reaction. If you know what that means that don't be stupid and change the plot in some way if the character even remotely gets involved with the main cast.
3. Character and Personality. I don't know what else to tell you except actually make her feel real and not some fake doll. What are her goals? Dreams? Motivations for her actions. Make those points clear as early as you can for a better character.
4. Last thing either don't add a system or keep it to a very minimal thing. Systems always break any kind of immersion I would have in a story because everything seems very fake and forced. Its fine if a system is purely used for checking stats and that's it but don't add missions, shops, or a sentient A.I. Keep it very simple just like in Overlord, nothing more nothing less.
Sorry if I annoyed you with this review but 99% of all fanfiction are just written by hormonal teenagers that just half-ass their story and wish they were some MC with lots of b**ches they can f**k. Completely disrespecting the author and the story. In Perverted harem stories like these its just the opposite. Authors follow the source too closely and seem to forget their is an actually world outside that small town the story takes place in and its not just about boobs.
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