Nice Idea, bad execution. Hero gests System, copyed to deatch element, but that is not a problem. Problem is its chaotic with no reference to reality, abilitys and stats mean nothing to the reader. MC feals very shallow and lifeless. Its hard to get into the world as well, no atmosfere or plot. Also tags DC, Marvel... etc. basicly a excuse for easy chapter, why write a story when you can just send MC into a moddle of DC plot line.
Nice Idea, bad execution. Hero gests System, copyed to deatch element, but that is not a problem. Problem is its chaotic with no reference to reality, abilitys and stats mean nothing to the reader. MC feals very shallow and lifeless. Its hard to get into the world as well, no atmosfere or plot. Also tags DC, Marvel... etc. basicly a excuse for easy chapter, why write a story when you can just send MC into a moddle of DC plot line.
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