Karnel's PoV:
The Grand Plains. One of the most famous landmarks on the continent...despite there being nothing here. Normally, one could see the majestic plains where peaceful animals and monsters were living...yet now, there is only green moss stretching towards the horizon.
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| Event 3-A: | Plains of Moss |
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The remnants of the Disaster of Life are being removed with incredible speed thanks to the contribution of the populace of the Wakoku country. However, not everything is back to normal. Give a hand and remove the Ghast Moss from the Grand Plains of Luxuria. |
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This Ghast Moss, which started to infest the plains at an alarming rate due to the effects of the remaining lifeforce left behind by the Disaster of Life, is preventing normal monsters from returning to the Plain even after the Disaster was pushed back. The Moss is an important ingredient for MP-recovering potions, but it is lacking in nutrients, so monsters and animals cannot live on them.
This is bad on several levels. To take one of the many examples for why it is important, the first thing that comes to my mind is the Bloodrush Bulls. They are nomadic bovines that are a bit of a handful to take care of, so people would rather let them thrive here on the plains which they prefer over any other place on the continent.
I continued to scoop up patches of moss with my Earth Magic and placed them on the plates of rock that I used for transport. After I had collected a decent amount, I used [Earth Manipulation] to pull the plates back to the event supervisors. They gathered the moss I had brought and then gave me the Prize Points and bounty for it.
Yes, there is a bounty on the moss. The emperor of Wakoku has placed a bounty on the moss so people would follow the law that prevents its destruction. Obtaining money and Points at the same time, did I perhaps take the luckiest event?
I have amassed over 3,000 Points already, and I am just halfway into the first day. The other contenders seem to be struggling. They do not have any terrain-manipulating skills, so they simply harvest the moss with swords or scythes, like they are wheat. The moss is big enough to reach an adult's knees, so they are not so wrong in their method...
Hmm? Is there no one here with Earth techniques like mine? Why not!? They are so useful...
I tried to drown my sorrow over my favorite element being so neglected with the lunchbox that I had taken with me from the Dungeon. After evolving into a Gargoyle, I could finally eat food now. It is not needed, but it's a luxury I can live with. Revi's homemade food is just so good~!
*rattle, rattle*
I stopped when I heard a sound coming from the moss. It's...a small animal? No, a crab? A green and black-colored crab. The inside of the shell is concealed in darkness, and only a pair of glowing green eyes can be seen.
It doesn't look so dangerous...maybe it is some kind of land-based crab that wanted to move to the Plain, but it never got the nutrient it needed from the moss?
Feeling sorry for the weak-looking crab, I decided to give it one of my sandwiches. Wonder if it can eat...it ate it all!
You sure were hungry. Want another one? Gone! Then seconds-, I mean, thirds? Wow!
Where does this little guy put all that food? He is no bigger than a cat, yet eats like a horse. I kept on feeding my new little friend until,
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SYSTEM MESSAGE: Individual, [Mythforest Crab], has asked to become your companion. Do you want to form a contract with the individual, [Mythforest Crab]? Y/N |
This is new. I do remember having a skill called [Forest Ally], but for it to work on crabs...ah! It says that it is a "Mythforest Crab", so it must be something there. No, it has to be! Anything else would be stupid.
W-well... it is a cute little critter...why not?
I pressed the "yes"-button and the crab started to glow in a pale-green light. After it stopped the little guy started to jump around and snap with its pincers. He looks happy...
"Hehe. If we can get stronger, maybe we can get more friends..." - Karnel
Hearing my words, the crab froze for a moment.
Eh, did you not like that idea...? As I thought about that, the crab produced a rope vine and wrapped it around my waist...huh? WHAAAAA!!??
Why is this little guy dragging me around like this!? And how!!? He's got more power hidden in that shell than I expected!! *Gasp*, A Ghastly Grandmoss! Escape! Return! Go baaaack!
*Snip, snip, snippety snip, snip, SNIP!*
And...the mound-sized moss monster was reduced to pieces...eh? Did I recruit a little powerhouse? No, that's not important! Stop dragging me around to look for mooooore of theeeeem!!
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Ciara's PoV:
...Where am I...what was I doing?
I tried to look around, but the area is completely foggy...did I drink too much again? The last time this happened was right after I evolved into my current fairy race and decided to celebrate with a bang...I woke up with six men around me, all looking a little too "drained"...
Ey, stop thinking about pink stuff! This is an abnormal situation. Switch the R-18 gears with the serious gears and get the machinery going!
Okay, I remember even stupid stuff like that night party, so I should remember the rest! And the last thing I remember is... that I was about to read the info regarding the third event. But the contents...no clue. I can't remember.
Could this memory loss be related to the event? I can't write off the chance of something else happening, but for now, I will go with the assumption that this is event-related!
Then...what should I do? It's all foggy, like, LITERALLY! It feels like back when I was in high school and we had a surprise test, ahahaha...
It feels scary moving forward on my own, so...[Ink Demons]~. Time to play~.
I sent one demon in each direction into the fog, hoping for a reaction of some kind...fast!? That's too fast! One of the Ink Demons got sliced in half!
The perpetrator is...foggy. Again. It feels like a mass of fog in a humanoid shape, but this fog is slightly different in its appearance. Not sure why...uh, fog-guy? Are you holding a sword...yikes!
The fog-guy slashed at me (I think? Can't see what they are holding), but the remaining Ink Demons used their bodies to block the attacks, which gave me time to shrink into a size that would let me fit in a normal person's hand and took to the sky. The fog-guy looked at me (I think?) and slashed with the weapon in his hand-, a flying slash!? Crap!
They missed me, but just because I was too small of a target and that one of their feet slipped a little due to the ink on the ground that used to be my demons. Looks like I have no other choice but to fight, I took out my new magic staff, which has the appearance of a marine-blue spear, and started to retrieve Magic Recordings from my Library to release a rain of Water Magic on my foggy opponent.
But, of course, any mysterious opponents aren't going to fall for such a lame counterattack! Why are you cutting all those spells like they were made of butter!? Those are sort of strong, you know!
Forget about saving here, I'll bring out the big spells! Large sea waves came out of the next set of Recordings, each one is my strongest AoE spell, and crashed into the foggy guy.
...hey, are you related to Moses? Because I can't think of any other reason why you are so capable of splitting my ocean spells so easily!
While I was dazed from the shock, the fog-guy ran towards me with their weapon ready. In a desperate attempt, I released so many magic spells that I probably could match a warship when it comes to barrages, yet it barely made a difference! Who do you think you are? Garami!?
The fog-guy almost reached me, so I used "Single Stroke", a magic spell from the new [Paranormal Artistry (Painting)] skill. It's sort of a magic spell mixed with martial arts. I moved my staff like I was using it as an overgrown brush, and from its trail was an ink-like substance, like I had painted a stroke in thin air. One that damaged the fog-guy as my attack managed to hit him.
...I hit him?! And who said that desperate attacks never work. ...forget that. It didn't work. It only pushed him back a little!
As I prepared my staff again, I noticed that the fog was starting to dissipate. Fearing that the fog bastard was doing something, I locked on to him, but he seems to be just as perplexed as me.
The two of us continued to stare each other down as the fog gradually turned to nothing. When it was all gone, I found myself in an opening in a forest with some huuuuge tree... and I seem to have knocked several of them down with my magic assault. Whoops.
Fog-guy is no longer foggy...hey! I know that guy!
"...it seems we have been played for fools," said the knight in shining armor who was standing in front of me. The same guy who I was unknowingly fighting against just a few moments ago...
"AAAH!! The event!" - Ciara
"...damn. For me to make such a mistake..." - Knight
I remember now! The event was to get rid of this fog! Specifically, the creatures that created it!
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Yamatai Grand Festival |
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| Event 3-C: | Forest of Mist |
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A group of pests has infested the Daijukai forest, close to the Grand Plains of Luxuria. The monsters inhabiting this great forest have fled not to be caught in the pests' veil of mist and confusion, and it is up to you to clear these majestic woods of mist and vermins alike. |
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I looked around and found the culprits. What should I call them...pixies? They look, and it pains me to say, sort of similar to me right now. Small, human-shaped, and with bug wings. The difference is that their wings look like a fly's, and their skin is blue. Not to forget about those huge, rolling black eyes and bug-like antennas.
They must have been smashed from my water spells. Some of them look like the poor remains of houseflies who have gotten a close meeting with a fly swatter. The fact that they're drenched further points to me as the culprit...I am not guilty! Wait, these are monsters. Forget that! And I should probably stop using magic that can fall 10-meter large trees wildly like that from now on...
"Mist Pixies. Damn bugs," said the knight with disgust.
"Ehm..." - Ciara
"...excuse me there. I have bad memories with inhuman fay." - Knight
"Oh, yes, no worries." - Ciara
"Inhuman", he says. True, I do not want to be grouped with those things...I am not grouped with them, am I?
"Pardon my manners, madam. I am sir Percel, leader of the Fallen Knights order, at your service." - Percel
"O-okay...I am Ciara Tritonia. A hu-humble painter working for Nightmare Voyagers, led by our Guild Master, Garami." - Ciara
"-? Did you say 'Garami'?" - Percel
"Yes...?" - Ciara
"What a small world we live in. Madam, may I ask you for assistance in this event?" - Percel
"Me? What for?" - Ciara
"Look around. Our rivals are trapped by those blasted pixies," said the knight while gesturing his arm towards the rest of the forest...
Hey! He's right! Other competitors are trapped in what looks like a barrier of mist! Or, is it mist? We can see their figures clearly, but if we were in the same thing, then it must be impossible for the guys inside to know what happens on the outside. And at the edge of those barriers, you can see more of those "Mist Pixies"!
"I am unfortunately not gifted in the field of 'long-range' attacks, and these abominable creatures can easily hide in the mist if needed. If you can shoot them down with your magic, I will offer my sword in protecting you." - Percel
Hey, what's going on here? I'm soooo being checked out by this handsome knight! No, I don't know how he looks beneath that helmet, but his voice alone tells me that he's a goddamn stud!
"Ok-, I mean, if you insist." - Ciara
KYAAAAA!!
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Noire's PoV:
"And what do you mean by that?" - Noire
We were standing by a huge shrine when this obnoxious ogress came and told us such a blatant lie. Despite my honest question, the ogress looked at me confused, like she didn't understand my question.
"Ehm...I know it is normally haughty to say something like "I am the most beautiful in the land", but that was the point of the whole contest!" - Konoha Sakumatai
Hmph! This random god that lives in the shrine back here suddenly decided to hold a beauty pageant and this girl gets all high and mighty because she won? Hah! If Lady Filyn entered, she would blow the bitches that would even dare to enter! No, Lady Filyn wouldn't need to enter such a tasteless contest to prove her beauty for the world!
"And that is simply pure arrogance on your part! I could easily obtain a hundred times more votes if I entered." - Noire
"...yes, yes. That is certain. Now, for this event-" - Konoha
Grr, she's waving me off! The nerves!
"What!? Are you saying that I couldn't do it!" - Noire
"Huh? I mean...look at yourself," said the ogress with a troubled look...this little-!
"Yes, yes, OF COURSE, I can't win! Not when the challenger has such a porn body like yourself, is that what you want to say!?" - Noire
"Porn-!? Just what do you-!" started the ogress, but before she finished, I demonstrated my point.
"I mean this body that can gather the votes of anything with some junk on their crotch by wearing next-to-nothing outfits!" I shouted as I grabbed those overly big boobs that the pervy ogress was practically showing off with that low-end yukata she was wearing!
"You bastard-!" shouted some guy at the back of the stage, but I don't care! Justice is being served here!
"Want a fight? Then you got one!" I shouted as I dropped a gem by my feet, which grew into a huge, humanoid shape, my [Gem Guardian].
"This little-!" said the ogress as she knocked away my hands and drew her Wakoku-sword made of gem crystals...?
"A gem sword?" - Noire
"Yes, this is..., wait, a gem golem?" - Konoha
"Precisely, a Guardian, but good guess, Kono-chan~." - ???
A third party entered our discussion before we had noticed..., how did we fail to notice this guy!?
From the shrine came a smoke-like body that has the appearance of a muscular male, yet he is dressed so feminine and with so much jewelry that you would doubt his gender despite not wearing much cloth. I can see he's even wearing lipstick and rouge.
"H-Ho-Hoshin-sama!" - Konoha
"Ya-hoo~, Kono-chan~. I felt that the event was taking so long, so I came to look~." - Hoshin
"P-please excuse me for this delay!" said the ogress with a loud voice as she kneeled in front of this suspicious character.
"No~, no~, it's fiiiine~. And you, missy~? What's your name~?" - Hoshin
"Noire. Member of the Nightmare Voyagers and the true most beautiful person in the world." - Noire
Lady Filyn is above the concept of humans after all, so I need to step up as her representative. And the likes of Garami and Mira will not do. They are either too lazy, greedy, or bloodthirsty.
"Ahahaha! Lady, I like you~." - Hoshin
"H-Hoshin-sama! Please ignore this brat and I will start the event-" - Konoha
"That...hmm, forget it~." - Hoshin
"...what?" - Konoha
The ogress turned pale upon hearing the words of this... "god". With a clap from the jewelry-clad figure, a System Window appeared in front of us all.
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| Event 3-D/alter: | Gem of a Woman |
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The Lesser God of Jewels and Beauty has spoken. This event will be a showdown between Konoha Sakumatai from the Empire of Wakoku and Noire from the Nightmare Voyagers Guild. The rules will be the same as the yearly "Princess of Hoshin" event, where the two competitors will work to obtain votes from the people living around the Shrine of Hoshin. Have your "princess", the representative and leader of the camp, show her beauty, smarts, and whatever else to turn the voters into their mindless subjects~. As a special addition to the rule, the losing princess will have to fulfill a single request for the winner for one year, as long as it does not come in the way of their official duties. |
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"WHAAAAAT!?!?" - Konoha
"Oho~? This is interesting~." - Noire
"Riiight~?" responded the god of jewelry as he peeked from behind my shoulders. "And you blokes, you chose which of these girlfriends you wanna serve, okay~?" he said to the remaining participants of the event.
"W-what are-!?" - Konoha
"The schedule will be: using this day for everyone to select their preferred camp to participate in, the next five days to gather votes, then on the final day, we will count those suckers~. And Kono-chan, instead of just standing there, you should think about how to drive your campaign. Even this cutie-pie is working her clockwork as we speak~." - Hoshin
Tch, is he a mindreader? That's disgusting.
"Please, I don't read that far~," said the god, but he instantly broke his cover. "And as an apology, how about I gift a little present in the form of a Blessing if you win, no~?" - Hoshin
"Why would I want something like that?" I asked, not caring about the poison that was cladding my words. As if the Blessing of someone that is not Lady Filyn is worth anything.
"Now, now~, it's not that bad~. With my Blessing, you can fashion the finest jewelry, say, like a ring for your beloved-" - Hoshin
"I humbly accept, Hoshin-sama!!" - Noire
"O-oh...this girl's dedicated, alright..." - Hoshin
"H-Hoshin-sama. Something is bugging me here...the event's description is mentioning a bet of some kind..." asked the ogress with a face that would make you believe she has given up on everything in the world.
"A competition is sooo~ much fun when there is something on the line, riiight~?" - Hoshin
"Yes, if you say so... in that case, I will announce my bet here and now." - Konoha
"Fancy that you would say so. I was planning on the same thing." - Noire
"In that case, should you, Noire the ringmaker-," - Konoha
Ringmaker? Where did...oh, yeah, those old craftsmen that I demonstrated my abilities for in the first event did call me something among those lines. Has that name gotten famous already?
"You are to create accessories for the imperial army to use of the utmost quality and with the greatest abilities you can enchant them with for the duration of the bet, meaning one year!" - Konoha
"And if I win, you have to start acting as a strip-dancer in all the pubs and clubs in the village close to this place." - Noire
".........what did you say? What did you say? Hey, WHAT DID YOU SAY!!?" - Konoha
The remaining contenders, who had a look on their face that said that they wanted to support the ogress until just now, changed into that of horny dogs. Even the girls. The so-called god started to laugh so much that he will bust a gut at this rate. Oh, and a System Message appeared for me too.
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Why? This is the standard practice in the Babel Organization handbook for combatants to act like. We are not as soft as those scapegoats acting for the decoy organization after all. Still, how weird.
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| Name: | Ciara Tritonia "Master Painter" | |
| Race: | Morgan Fairy | Gender: Female | |
| Level: | 15 | |
| Karma Value: | -169 | |
| Main Class: | Paranormal Painter Lv.11 |
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| Skills: | 87 | |
| Titles: | 17 | |
| Blessings: | 1 | |
| Skill Points: | 1.8 | |
| HP: 344/344 | MP: 427/427 | SP: 266/266 |
| STR: 265 | VIT: 269 | MAG: 536 |
| RES: 463 | SPD: 337 | DEX: 527 |
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| Name: | Noire "Master Craftsman" | |
| Race: | Fallen Nehushtan | Gender: Female | |
| Level: | 30 | |
| Karma Value: | -200 <Vain> | |
| Main Class: | Mystic Archer Lv.28 | |
| Sub Class: | Goldsmith Lv.24 | |
| Sub Class: | Rune Mage Lv.41 | |
| Sub Class: | Fallen Mage Lv.15 | |
| Skills: | 112 | |
| Titles: | 24 | |
| Blessings: | 0 | |
| Skill Points: | 4.8 | |
| HP: 400/400 | MP: 731/731 | SP: 338/338 |
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huum, I liked the chapter. Looks like Ciara has become less useless now, she's gained some good skills and her stats have increased a lot. Karnel has found a new friend... a little dangerous, but seems to be a good friend. And Noire has my respect, she has over 800 MAG and she has evolved a lot of skills.
So Noire is a ring maker and can make enchanted rings that give the wearers effects. She can use magic that corrupts people's minds. She also wants to make a special ring for Filyn, perhaps even one to rule them all?
There is only one lord of the rings and he does not like to share
@BlackWolf yes but it would be a Lady of the rings...
I still want Garami to go to the celestial continent where Noire was born. I really want her to throw it in her parents' face the mistake was to kick her out of the house.
[Suffocation Resistance Lv.11] NEWxFrom title: [Drowner].
[Pain Resistance Lv.25] NEW341 Skill Point.
[Fear Resistance Lv.22] NEW35From title: [Daredevil].
I don't think she use these 3 in battle or swining
Author sama
Wasn't Konoha an oni?
Yup, but Noire can't see the diference. She's the kind of girl who would think a ninja and a NINJA SLAYER is the same thing.
All caught up!
It's nice to see SOME character development, but as said in a few other comments, too few of them were actually shown.
I like the story and it's really good, but there's a big problem of telling instead of showing. A lot of the character interactions and developments are TOLD to us in hindsight rather than SHOWN to us in the moment. But i digress as this is well trodden ground...
Keep up the great work!
Why do I feel that Ciara's [Rider] skill isn't from riding a mode of transport...
@Greydra Thanks for the chapter! Noire just won didn't she... I guess I'll find out next.
alarming rate due to being affected by the remaining lifeforce left behind by the Disaster of Life,
alarming rate due to the effects of the remaining lifeforce left behind by the Disaster of Life,
MP-recovering potions, but it fatally lacks in nutrition,
MP-recovering potions, but it is lacking in nutrients,
thing that comes up in my mind
thing that comes to my mind
nomadic bovines that are a little bit of a handful in taking care of,
nomadic bovines that are a bit of a handful to take care of,
I continued to scope up piles of earth with the moss through my Earth Magic and placed them on the plates made of rock that I used for transport.
I continued scooping up piles of earth covered moss with my Earth Magic and placed them on the plates of rock that I used for transport.
Wakoku has placed a bounty on the moss so people would follow the law that prevents the destruction of it.
Wakoku has placed a bounty on the moss so people would follow the law that prevents its destruction.
so they simply harvest the moss with swords or scythes, like they were wheat.
so they simply harvest the moss with swords or scythes, like they are wheat.
The moss is big enough to reach an adult's knees, so they are not so wrong with their method…
The moss are big enough to reach an adult's knees, so they are not so wrong in their method…
He is not bigger than a cat,
He is no bigger than a cat,
As I thought that, the crab produced a rope of vines and wrapped it around my waist...huh?
As I thought about that, the crab produced a rope vine and wrapped it around my waist...huh?
He got more power hidden in that shell than one could expect!!
He's got more power hidden in that shell than I expected!!
Recognizing that I had no other choice than to fight,
Looks like I have no other choice but to fight,
each being of my strongest AoE spell, and crashed into the foggy guy.
each one are my strongest AoE spell, and crashed into the foggy guy.
these majestic woods for mist and vermins alike.
these majestic woods of mist and vermins alike.
That they're drenched further points toward me as the culprit..
The fact that they're drenched further points to me as the culprit..
I can see he's even wearing makeup such as lipstick and rouge.
I can see he's even wearing lipstick and rouge.
Join one of the two camps and strive to allow your princess victory!
Join one of the two camps and strive to carry your princess to victory!
whenever your camp wins or not.
whether your camp wins or not.
Even this cutie-pie is working her clockwork as we speak~.
Even this cutie-pie is working her brain as we speak~.
greatest abilities you can inbound to them for
greatest abilities you can enchant them with for
changed into that of horndogs.
changed into that of horny dogs.
Updated~~.
Author sama
How big are the 14 continents?
It variates between them. The Invidia continent at least is considered the same size as Australia. Oh, but the Celestial continents are smaller compared to the land-based ones.
@Greydra
Somehow it feels like story too fragmented(not sure if it is right word). Like there should be another chapter between each chapter. Characters personalities changes and relation developments happen off-screen and it is little confusing.
If this is about Noire in this chapter, then I'll explain. Was gonna do it in the later chapters anyway, so it's a good rehearsal:
In the first event, Noire's ego got enlarged when she started to demonstrate her ring-making abilities on a whim. And her "audience" are some of the local master-crafters.
To keep it short, she became finally conscious of her talent.
Plus people gave her lots of nice comments when she acted as a waitress. She has the perfect "build" for a Yamato Nadeshiko, you know.
@Greydra First, English is not my native language so i am sorry for awful grammar and i guess some i will write further can make no sense because of that.
Well she from start showed things like slightly bad personality, tendention to look down on others or jealously to anyone who have big boobs so her enmity towards Konoha not surprising. But her attitude towards to Fylin somewhat out line(?). I mean even if she showed admiration, respect to Fylin she still was somewhat rational and calm. In this chapters she suddenly acts like brainwashed crazy fanatic who openly belittle actual Lesser God. It was ok if that was gradual change in her character, but it appears out nowhere. Basically it either her behavior(in case of her attitude toward Fylin) in this chapter falls out norm of her personality(based on how she acted before), or there was some change in her personality which readers didn't seen.
Similar case was with recent the appearance of Fylin. Her personality wasn't that well-defined because she didn't appear in story much so her sudden lewdness perfectly fine but it was presented in form that Garami already knew that trait of Fylin. Add fact that Fylin seems trust Garami enough to add her to real evil organization and it implies that they spent enough time interacting together. And there is little problem because readers(at least me) didn't seen those interactions. Fylin was background character(although important story wise) and suddenly she is close to main character.
Another case i can remember was R-18 chapter with Garami\Mira. It was hinted several times that they have s*x before extra chapter itself but still felt out nowhere. in later chapters Mira motive to getting intimate with Garami was explained but it was later and there wasn't any further developments(except Mira pestering Garami about gacha). That makes relationships between them vague. Are they lovers or simply f*ck buddies, are they friends or just hang together because there is nothing better to do? Does Garami even care about Mira, or she just another subordinate like Flint or Lily?
We(I at least) dont see process of them getting closer only result. All that makes feel gaps in character interactions. Like there some missing content which should be there but for some reason didn't appeared.
@carasu In that way~. Yeah, good point. Character-building isn't my strongest side, I agree. I'll take note of that for future chapters. Thanks for telling me.
@carasu my english is really bad so you can just ignore this comment but in the story noire always be described as a fanatic ( so she isn't acting ou of her character) about fylin/garami the relation is already explained and before had be foreshadowing by noire.
Ah and about mira/garami my perspective can be a little because I read the previous version so I will not arguing with you but if you talk about the tone of their relations you should read the chapter that have de revi pov in desert that you can possibly found your answer
@Greydra a recommendation on the Mira and Garami case. When Ciara's thoughts come up, she always talks about something sexual, or her preferences or her adventures, so you can put in some of that. Put some scenes of Mira and Garami talking something more intimate, or a scene of them more intimate, it doesn't have to be an R-18, but just a few phrases, some little flirtations between them, some touching or playing, that would make their relationship lighter . As for Filyn and Noire, I recommend some chapter where Noire tells in more detail why she loves Filyn so much, maybe the scene when Filyn saved her and took care of her, and stuff, and some scene of Filyn talking to Noire would go down really well.
@Shoto Love-talk between Mira and Garami? Okay! Noire rambling like a cult-leader? Think we all are gonna regret it, but okay...
@Greydra and just a recommendation, continue to create chapters where several POVs of different characters appear can also be an alternative. For example, I thought Karnel's scene was really cool, it showed his personality. you can invest in that in the next chapter, for example Mira might be missing Garami, Iron wants to do something, Lily tell a little about her. are suggestions of what can be done for a change.
@Greydra I already regret recommending a meeting of Noire with Filyn....
@Shoto Wasn't the back story on Noire - Fylin relationship already heavily hinted at? Something like Noire getting banished and thrown out of her hometown because of the deprave skill she got as one of her 5 initial skills, then rescued by Fylin and co. Hence the heavy fanaticism.
but that's not a great explanation, what I was saying was to show a little bit of what Noire did in that period that she was under Filyn's protection and stuff. to give a little more history behind this fanaticism.
@crazedreader