Harold Smith was busy reading an important document when his private phone’s ringing sound startled him. Looking at it, he saw that it was an unknown number.
But still, he chose to answer. In his line of work, he can’t afford to miss an important call.
“Hello, “ he said.
“A Hello Uncle.” a confidant young man answered from the other side.
“May I know who is it?” He asked,
“Yes, I am Victor white.”
“Ah, young master Victor, your father has already informed me that you would be living in Vein city, are you here already? “
He said polity while remembering master Theodor’s stern order to take care of his son who will be living in Vein city. As the city’s police chief, he knew some secrets, held a responsibility toward the safety of the family’s heirs under his jurisdiction.
“Yes, I arrived yesterday,”
“That’s good. If I can help you, young master, with anything, I am always ready.”
“I know, and that is why I am calling. I just had an accident on the highway...”
“Ah, are you alright?” he asked in a frightened voice. If anything were to happen to this young master, especially on the day of his arrival, he might lose his head. Or worst, his position.
“No, Everything is fine. It’s just that I was delayed by an unreasonable young police officer. She insisted that I should go to the station with her.”
There is only one young traffic officer who came to his mind. But he hoped it was not her.
“Can you see her tag, is her name, Lea Smith?”
“Yes, precisely.”
“F*** !!!” he cursed, “Young master, don’t worry, I will fix this right away. Please get her on the phone.”
“OK,”
“This is for you” he could hear the young master talking to his daughter but the next moment there was a sound of a crash and the call ended.
“F*** !!!”
He could guess what had just happened. This daughter of his is getting more unreasonable as she grew up.
So he quickly fumbled with his phone to make a call, but due to the shaking of his hand, it took him two full minutes to dial his daughter’s phone number.
She answered after a few beeps. And her sweet voice calmed him a little bit. Maybe he can salvage the situation, he thought.
“Hi daddy, is there anything, I am busy arresting a filthy criminal down here and I will call you when I finish,” she said intending to hang up.
“Is his name Victor white?” he asked
“Ah, yes,...”
“He didn’t do anything illegal, right? Let him go right now, that’s an order” he can’t be soft with this girl anymore, or she would be the end of him.
“No, he didn’t. But daddy, he is very suspicious. I am sure he has some nasty secrets.” she said in a soft voice.
“LOOK, IF YOU DON’T LET HIM GO RIGHT NOW, I WILL FIRE YOU FROM THE POLICE FOR DISOBEYING ORDERS.”
He didn’t want to yell at her. But some things must be done. He can’t simply tell her how horrible this guy’s family is. She would probably naively attempt to arrest them and end up dead with the rest of the police squad in the process.
“OK, fine,” she said.
He could hear the aggrieved voice of his daughter and that made his heart bleed. But before he could say anything she hang up the phone, and he knew she was very angry with him.
But he was sure she would do the right thing, ...probably.
sigh...
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@Akaichi I just find this new cop character (the woman) to be tiring to read about. There aren't people like that in real life. If she wants to punish him by following the law, no problem. But she is breaking the law to punish an innocent person all while justifying it based on how 'he looks'. Ugh its hard to read
@miscjt She has a thing against young masters, maybe I made her a little too unreasonable, but she and the car accident are part of the plot. And she just wanted to pressure not arrest him
@Akaichi Way too unreasonable. Tone it down by 80%
@miscjt I will have to edit the last couple of chapters. But OK, I think this would make it turn better, but it will add a lot of foreshadowing.
@Akaichi Sounds good. Perhaps she schedules an appointment to discuss what transpired. Maybe they investigate the wreckage and find an explosive device so she asks for his cooperation but also has a grudge against him etc.
Remember, his lusty young master disguise is just a disguise. He can't let people sh*t all over him if he hopes to be a powerful/a big boss from the shadows.
@Akaichi Yes it is unreasonable. No, don't change previous chapters. You can't change everything each time someone opposes. Just try to correct it in the upcoming chapters in some way. I don't know maybe just add someone with higher rank on the crash site to stop her. But don't change previous chapters.
@Degoneth I think he is better off changing them a bit. She comes off as a characature. Not a real person even in a fantasy world.
@miscjt You have a point but I would rather read a complete story with flaws instead of an incomplete one. He is already rewriting the whole story. If he changes a few chapters everytime someone says unreasonable the story would be worse in the long run and may even end unfinished.
@miscjt I don't really mind editing as long as it would not change the plot, and I did also feel that there was something wrong in here. Although. The police officer being unreasonable was my intention
@Akaichi The problem was not her. It was everyone else's lack of reaction. Someone like her really exists but they put her down immediately. If her father cares her he would have put her under someone he trusts. So a superior on the site just warns her would be better than the phone call. She is fine. You just put the last reaction, the call, first thing in the story.
@Akaichi Ehhh there is unreasonable and a lunatic. Its like a cop showing up to the scene of a shooting and arresting the victim who is bleeding from a gunshot wound because he has a moustache lol
@miscjt Exactly the effect I am going for
@Akaichi Really but that's not realistic at all? I read that and I think 'nope' this doesn't work. If it was pure comedy and I knew it wasn't serious then that's different.
@miscjt I will try to edit it later so the reasons behind her actions are clear. but I am a discovery writer so I don't know how it would end up.
@miscjt Trust me. There are people like that. But their superiors usually put a tight leash on them. So unless you are an insider it is hard to realize just how broken they are. I can open a thread in the forum and share some real life stories if you are interested.
@Degoneth I've never met or heard of someone like that who isn't mentally ill. If so then its no laughing matter
@Akaichi Yes! Just take notes on somewhere like an edit suggestions journal. Then after you have finished the story or maybe the volume, you can work on them. Because what is unreasonable right now may be much more reasonable after you have shared the backstory of the character.
@miscjt I don't know where are you from or how old are you but trust me 10-20% of the population where I work is just like that. Unless some young master really does something or someone takes the things to the court and sometimes even then, they basically behave just like that woman.
@Degoneth I've lived and worked in several countries in several different provinces in different fields of work. Never seen people behave like that in a serious manner. Those who did were mentally unwell.
@miscjt Well lucky you then. I am working in the same place for 10 years. There are approximately 5000 people, at least 1/3 of them have PhDs on various fields. I never said that they are mentally healthy, but trust me they exist. God forbid, maybe even I am not healthy anymore after everything I saw and experience. It's just, before they do something really stupid, sane people react and prevent thing go south. But sometimes, s**t happens and those people act just like bad written characters in a novel.
@Akaichi she is not fit to be a police officer then... I know the bro code of police officers can allow them to get away with all kind of questionable sh*t but if you endanger all of them like she does they will drop you like a grenade and maybe get rid of you themselves if it's really bad...
What she did is not unreasonable or unheard of why she did it is expecially her openly admitting she has no evidence or reason to hold them past the fact that she hates the MC-so face.
A recording of that is enough to throw her into indefinite unpaid leave and since she has multiple offences there is enough justification to throw her off the force.
@miscjt Thats where youre wrong. There exist people like her.
Its species is known as 'Karen' in US
@Azel Oof. Hit the nail head on then bent it several centimetres to the left.
I have a scientific term for “people” like these. A species name as they don’t get to be called Homo Sapiens.
Homo Karenopsis. Subspecies: Karenopsis Irritannoyance.
@winterFox2 Damn. You have no idea how loud im laughing right now. You win bruh
@Azel There’s more too. I had been coming up with these “subspecies” and their descriptions for awhile because of how prolific they are becoming.
@miscjt they were found in a car with illegal drugs... She is within her prerogative to take them in for questioning unfortunately
@winterFox2 there are only 2 subspecies in my book the first one is irrational, emotional and crazy the second one is pedantic, vindictive and annoying.
She is part of the second group... while technically right she is bending the definition of right to the extreme and interpreting everything to the letter as long as it suits her.
@Akaichi no pressure the plots going nicely
@miscjt how do you know there are no cops like that in real life? Have you never seen fake drug implant videos?
And many other crazy racist cop videos where cops go to any length to trouble and arrest the target. There are thousands of scary videos on YouTube only. Some old famous cases don't even have videos.
People can be unreasonably petty to unbelievable levels.