Another issue I have is that it feels more like the Author decides how they want the story to go and dumbs down the MC to fit when necessary. Whenever the MC makes a choice it's like she breaks the 4th wall and thinks "what would be best for the story right now" instead of just making her choices based on her circumstances. There are always these authors notes at the end of particularly egregious chapters trying to explain it away but it just makes the MC look like an idiot and the author lazy.

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She has an unrestricted 24hr time loop power that she basically just doesn't use outside of extremely obvious circumstances because she just "doesn't wanna" essentially. The orphan, poor-as-dirt, slum-living, commoner-ass MC doesn't even use her power to save money/materials for christs sake. Doesn't use it to try and check up on the sister she abandoned. Nothing is stopping her from reading through every damn book in the library with her insane comprehension speed.

She even straight up gives up on a quest because it's too hard as if she doesn't get infinite chances. She didn't attempt to complete it. This is justified in an authors note by something along the lines of "She'll get skills in later quests so it's not a big deal" but big problem SHE DOESN'T KNOW THAT FOR GODS SAKE. She is supposed to be setting up to get revenge. She wouldn't be willing to give up ANY scrap of power at this point.

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Overall I just don't get why you would give an MC a time loop power if it clearly goes against the kind of story you want to write. You need to justify the MC's decisions WITHIN THE STORY instead of just adding post hoc explanations into an authors note as if that means anything.

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ssssfdghg

Status: chapter 69 – the curse of hunger

May 27, 2024

I must say This is one of the best novels I've read

-She grows as a character

-Has a powerful but not OP character

-greet pacing

-Greet grammar

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FantasyDrifter

Status: chapter 11 – diminishing returns

Aug 25, 2024

This is called "Technomancer: Birth of a Goddess." If it isn't a power fantasy then it's inappropriatley named.

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She has a 24 hour time loop ability and she doesn't try to escape the city? Her dad literally said that they couldn't avoid the gaurds. But she could.

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I get wanting your character to fail at times but this very much feels like the author had a specific outcome in mind (and NOT a pleasant one) and wrote to that end.

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Why couldn't one of her family run off and/or hide while she takes the heat. Or some other possibilty. There's a ton of stories about how op time loop abilities are and this just ignores almost all the valid points they make and resolves rather quickly with a sub par resolution.

She didn't try NOT telling them about her awakening. She didn't look for another way to misdirect them. She also didn't try not telling them about the theft or the crystals.

She suspects it's her awakening they felt and they don't follow broken crystals so... Find an explanation for the awakening and hide the crystals. This seems obvious and should be obvious to someone so analytical and literaly has unlimited time to think about this. Not to mention unlimited tries. Sure it's exhausting but for family it's worth it right?

This doesn't even begin to explore how she could have saved her dad with info she HAS available to her. He likes how the gems were cut and even asks the dad in chapter 12 if he did it. Have him say yes (even leave quickly jotted instructions for him or something). If her sister would be in more paril have her leave and hide her existence. These are high handed snooty mages. Why would they know or care that there's two daughters and not one. It's been over 3 months. Thus her dad would be spared for his tallent with gems and the sister could be hidden to be aided later.

Or is her love for her family a sham by an unreliable narrator?

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I have to agree with Directive58 and after seeing what they have to say about the next 30 chapters I'm out.

Ultimately though, I blame the title. I wanted a techno-magic, steampunk power fantasy. You expect me to believe that ascent to Godhood isn't about an OP MC? Then you need to rethink what a god is in almost all of fantasy. Or better, just rethink your title please.

I loved what little of the mana and techno system I saw. It really felt like a good start in that regard. I'm tempted to try stealing it and writing my own story... We might all be better off if I didn't do that though. ?

I'm leaving this with 3 stars because until she deliberatley chose tragedy I was really excited about the story.

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As an after note that's probably best ignored: While starting a story off with tragedy has worked well many times I think it fell flat here, at least for me. This isn't really a revenge flick, and it shouldn't be. This should be about exploring the wonders of technomany that she found. If you really want, there's still room for tragedy but I feel this outcome is too much for this story. What would be better is if she hid the crystals but they stole her away from her family. Maybe a scar that she heals later. Tragic but not quite so complete or all consuming.

I just feel like a lot of stories don't know how to process injustice or tragedy properly and they just throw it in for flavor and texture. But that could just be me.

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nikitos00100

Status: chapter 86 – murderer

Jul 27, 2024

Great story, one of the best among my reading list. Writing is good, there is moments of infodumps and ngl after chapter 30 I started to skim these moments and I'm just glad that I found this story at 85 chapters done already, otherwise if I was going from chapter 1 it would be a little bit more annoying.

Romance is a bit rushed but it's still good, so not much complaints here, and considering overall quality so far I'm very optimistic and expectant for the future (my only request is as less angst as possible).

Story is good, flow is a bit slow, but a good slow imo, plot points are establishing, and world is building at good and smart pace. I would say if author can manage and not burn themself out (how many authors on this site are), story easily can go over 300-400 chapters.

Secondary characters are good, I noticed they are less cliche then I expected which is undoubtedly plus, no overbearing princes, no haughty noble ladies (so far atleast), they are quite balanced human being with their own goals. Sure here and there are super arrogant nobles, but who would you put down and face slap if not them.

Now main dish is MC. She is great, she grows, she learns, she is smart, on genius level smart, but not on cheating level genius, sure she has system that gives her foundation knowledge, and that is exactly it, MC herself must build from that foundation, and she does quite spectacularly, honestly can't wait for her electrical arc and further. She starts to become quite ruthless and most important she has her own problems that I hope she will overcome.

Overall great solid story so far, so do your thing author and give us more of this goody.

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SupernovaSymphony

Status: c109

Oct 16, 2024

This is an excellent progression story with deep and compelling characters. I don't think I've been bored at all during this ride, even on a reread. No information is unnecessary, nothing is wasted.

The writing is a bit stiff in my opinion, but it's far from incompetently written.

Easily one of my favourites on SH so far.

Edit: I figured out my issue with this. It's all written in present tense. Most things are written in past tense. It's honestly a bit grating, but I do really like this story. That is my biggest issue with it though.

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Ivory-Valynor

Status: chapter 103 – reunion

Sep 24, 2024

To note - there have been several revisions to earlier chapters since the low reviews were posted. There are reasons she doesn't/can't abuse her time abilities quite as much as one says, and this is not entirely a revenge story. Only one with revenge as a big plot point.

This is a technically well written story (even if I'll internally gripe over it being written in present tense) that follows a relatively clear logic and flow. Characters are distinct and diverse while remaining respectful to different cultures and not coming off as pandering.

My only real gripes with the story are personal ones. If the summary on the main page interests you, give it a shot. Regardless of its pacing or whatnot, it's interesting and going in even more interesting places.

Hope to see you in the comments.

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Penderdax

Status: c0

Jul 8, 2024

So much filler, so much redundant inner dialogue, so drawn out. I think the author keeps getting lost and starts writing down their own inner dialogue along with the MC's, lol.

Yet another so called story showing what and how not to do it. Cliche

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Kepler22b

Status: chapter 155 – scouting outpost

Mar 27, 2025

It's an interesting setup. Well written. I doubt you will regret anything if you give it a try. Fair warning: the MC has time travel, looping back 24h, but doesn't maximally utilise it. This is not a story about how OP time travel is, and, the author might have a kink on making Emily suffer. Despite its faults, the story itself takes you through an entretaining ride.

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shadies

Status: chapter 76

Jan 1, 2025

I really tried giving this a chance, it has really good moments but then makes some really weird choices later on.

It feels really slow but also too fast at the same time and also time travel is as I am maturing as a reader less and less my thing.

I am not going to write a long review so that is about it from me.

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