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Style:
I like the style, the grammar is good, the length of the chapters isn't too long (some are super long though) nor too short, and the word choice fits. It's good, I'm just not personally a fan. The whole feel of the style is on the more serious side, the MC brings in this kind of like 'evil mastermind' type of energy into the mix, and while it's a nice combination, I'm just not a fan. But, personal biases aside, I'd give the style a 4 out of 5 stars, -1 stars cause some chapters are too long.
Grammar:
Not much I can say, the grammar is good and there aren't many mistakes. 5/5 for sure.
Characters:
I like the characters, they're well written and have good personality quirks. But, the brother,
Carlos, is a bit flat, I'd say he's kind of childish for a 14-year-old, his competitiveness and way of expressing his sibling rivalry feels more like something that an eight-year-old would do, not a teenage boy. He feels more like a plot device than a character, and normally that would be okay, but he's the MC's sibling, and I expected that a competitive brother would have more to their character than sibling rivalry and the occasional useful characterising dialogue.
Overall, I like the book, it's just not my cup of tea. Don't get me wrong, mixing a xianxia and an isekai is totally original and I think you executed it well. I'm just not a fan of overly serious stories, I hope this gets the recognition it deserves, cause I personally do think it's well written.
I also love your little author notes BTW. That's about it!
PS: I'm writing this at like two in the morning, I apologize for any mistakes. Me brain not working lol
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