This story could be good, but heavily needs editing. 

It isn't that the grammar is necessarily bad, it is that some things just don't make sense. For example, it isn't clear if the MC knows the princess (they are clearly meeting for the first time... or not) ? But they act like they have known each other for years. Sometimes the author will write something, but clearly mean the opposite of what he means, and you have to infer what it means. 

Another thing is that sometimes the author just contradicts himself. An example could be that the MC has "fleshy wrists" compared to his isekai self, like you would presume he is fat, but then goes on to say that previously on Earth he could "swing a sword for 12 hours".

The end of Chapter 7 doesn't even make sense. Why just have a random name at the end of the chapter, too. You figure out in a chapter or 2 that that name is the princess's name, but it is a failed attempt at being edgy? Who knows.

Again, I feel like this could be good, I just think the author needs to re-read his own work or get a better editor to have it make more sense. 

3/5 stars.

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Great work. Please keep and good Lucky. TFTC.

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For me this is too short to read but I felt like this had the right edge I want in my stories and thought it had potential. I hope the author has time in the future to continue.

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