This is a story about a young man that, through a series of mundane and unnecessary large events, finds himself reborn as a mana core , that is both male and female. His or her nature lead to the birth of her own daughter. Now, together with her daughter, she discovers the laws of a reality with a natural energy called mana, while constantly trying to fix the issues her actions lead to.
This is the first time that I write anything on the scale of a book/novel and I am not a native english speaker, so the tense might be a bit wobbly and some things might just sound really odd for you. I can take some critic on my writing though, as I am aware that I'm not that good at it. I know where I want to go with my story, but as I have no script I have a lot of freedom.
The rewrite is done let's throw a party! (Though without me, I'm shy)
Thanks for reading!
A good story so far and a good balance of world building and MC development Idk why nobody reviews story's that are great like this. Though opinions do tend to differ. Yet why are there 340 people reading this while not reviewing.
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after reading a few chapters of this story I can say it has all the markings of a good author with a plan for the story and a good sense of worldbuilding.'
Be warned that this story has fallen into the not uncommon trap of giving a Non-human MC a projection/avatar/transformation, that allows them to be human or at least human like, and then proceeding to ignore (or at least reduce the focus on) the Non-human version of MC
Author has decided to make 2-3 chapters of "human" content per one chapter of non-human content.
(at least this is better than some other stories that completely ignore the fact MC is not human, (until its suddenly convenient for the story))
i do hope the story continues with the current quality, it may even become one of the top stories on this site one day.
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