Series: Lost to a severe case of depression a young man ultimately decides to take his own life and end his suffering. Much to his surprise however, his existence doesn’t simply vanish and he wakes up as a sapient reality-bending crystal sphere. During that questionable change the man lost memory of his name and apparently also became a mother, giving birth to a magical entity.
Now with a new name, Argul Agren decides to embrace this second chance of life and begins a journey of magical discovery together with her daughter Alyra.
Volume 1 (ch. 1-31): Through a series of mundane and unnecessary large events, a young man finds himself reborn as a mana core , that is both male and female. His or her nature lead to the birth of her own daughter. Now, together with her daughter, she discovers the laws of a reality changed by a natural energy called mana, while also trying to fix the issues her existence lead to.
This is the first time that I write anything on the scale of a book/novel and I am not a native english speaker, so the tense might be a bit wobbly and some things might just sound really odd for you. I can take some critic on my writing though, as I am aware that I'm not that good at it. I know where I want to go with my story, but as I have no script I have a lot of freedom.
The rewrite is done let's throw a party! (Though without me, I'm shy)
Thanks for reading!
A good story so far and a good balance of world building and MC development Idk why nobody reviews story's that are great like this. Though opinions do tend to differ. Yet why are there 340 people reading this while not reviewing.
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after reading a few chapters of this story I can say it has all the markings of a good author with a plan for the story and a good sense of worldbuilding.'
Be warned that this story has fallen into the not uncommon trap of giving a Non-human MC a projection/avatar/transformation, that allows them to be human or at least human like, and then proceeding to ignore (or at least reduce the focus on) the Non-human version of MC
Author has decided to make 2-3 chapters of "human" content per one chapter of non-human content.
(at least this is better than some other stories that completely ignore the fact MC is not human, (until its suddenly convenient for the story))
i do hope the story continues with the current quality, it may even become one of the top stories on this site one day.
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I wanted to like this one. The hook I think was fairly good.
After the first few chapters it felt more like a setup that just kept going on and on though. I kept waiting for it to be something other than just the system (daughter) and building a dungeon but after a while I found out that I just didn't care enough to continue because the slog turned me off to whatever payoff would come later on.
I'm not saying it is bad, I just didn't like the pacing. This is for someone that is a little bit more patient than I am.
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An amazing story, with relatable characters and realistic progression!
If I had any complaints it would be that the author didnt research religion enough before making people's faith manifest into pseudo-gods (although I dont blame them. Religion is a quagmire.), and that the MC hasnt really mentioned his former family much or even attempted to find them since returning to the mortal world. Although even that is understandable. Dont take my word for it, read for yourself!
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Well the story was good, entertaining, and had a good start. Where the trouble begins is when she gets a human form. If you're gonna write a non-human MC maybe don't have her get a human form and forsake the non-human aspect. There are chapters where she changes back to her non-human form but most of the time it's now not even what it was advertised. Overall, I just feel lied to; there's no reason to even consider labelling the novel as "non-human" and give the MC a human form. What if I wrote you a novel about a romance, but the MC breaks up with the person and never seriously dates again, aside from a few flings with the Significant Other. Would you enjoy that story? Would you love to read a novel that's whole point is romance, but take out the romance? Of course you wouldn't, so that's why any novel that blatantly displays non-human but gives the MC a human form gets a 1 star. You're basically clickbating your readers. Shame that you felt that you couldn't handle a full-time nonhuman MC. That or you're just like GhostyZ but with your entire plot rather than just a few chapters. Anyways, 1 star and I'm very disappointed.
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