The characters feel very 2D no character interaction besides one or two sentences in 18 chapters. No family interaction is a very big problem we don't even meet his sister until Chapter 20, that's a big yikes for me. These can easily be fixed by going back and adding scenes but it's completely optional.
The story has no pull as of Chapter 21 to make me want to read more. We need something. Maybe add some conflict or family drama. If you don't want to do that maybe go in another direction and add some more to the runes and the MC's exploration and observation of them.
This is my opinion but the story feels like you're skipping to get to the parts you want to write about and the rest of the story suffers.
Spring has come to Inari’s mountain, and even little kitsune and oni have to go to school. But spring also means that there are long forgotten things make their presence known.
I'll rate it three stars
Some tips for the author.
The characters feel very 2D no character interaction besides one or two sentences in 18 chapters. No family interaction is a very big problem we don't even meet his sister until Chapter 20, that's a big yikes for me. These can easily be fixed by going back and adding scenes but it's completely optional.
The story has no pull as of Chapter 21 to make me want to read more. We need something. Maybe add some conflict or family drama. If you don't want to do that maybe go in another direction and add some more to the runes and the MC's exploration and observation of them.
This is my opinion but the story feels like you're skipping to get to the parts you want to write about and the rest of the story suffers.
Overall not bad but it can be improved.
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