Honestly I'm all in for retribution, but the more I read past the "invasion" part his parents and his stepsisters (as well as the former Student Council Prez and the ex-girlfriend) did in the apartment, you made him sound like a bitter old man with lackluster anger management.

I have to say that I couldn't recommend this work to anyone, yet. Revenge is a dish best served cold, but yours are like boiled soup. But I guess I judged way too soon considering that it's still 17 chapters + prologue, but I say as a veteran author (who primarily dwelled in fanfiction for 7 years until he get to publish his first work), people might get tired of his remained cranky behavior if you dragged it past certain arcs.

Update on Chapter 18: Yeah, no. Still not recommended just yet. You just want to make him like the old Kratos, all anger, no resolve. And even if there's resolve, you just made him look like an embodiment of hostility.

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