I've had a look at the latest chapters (210 -215) and while the English is slightly better, each sentence on a new line is still difficult to read - you need to use paragraphs. I read for enjoyment, and unfortunately your story, while based on a few good ideas is just hard work to read and try to understand what you are trying to say. But keep at it, only through practice can you improve. I still have you followed so will look at any new stories of your in case they are easier to read.