This isn't bad. That is genuinely how I feel after reading upto chapter 52. It has an interesting premise and I like the writing style of author a bit because they take the time to describe things at a good pace which I appreciate.
However I also see some obvious shortcomings which can maybe improved in future?
First I feel author posted the rewrite in some hurry because in multiple chapters there are broken sentences, grammar or pronoun issues. Multiple chapters have comments from readers requesting a correction so maybe author will check it.
The MC has a personality similar to brick wall so far. Nothing really interesting to see. Epitome of a neutral character. He is not overly angry, he is not overly social, he isn't overly friendly. He is so balanced out that it feels strange. He really needs to display more stronger emotions of any kind. MC interacts with people the bare minimum as and when necessary else not at all.
Unfortunately this also seems to apply to skills of the MC. The story premise in description indicates MC has 2 amazing bloodlines. But till chapter 52 it has instead turned out that MC is an above average talent but his dual bloodlines offer no significant benefit. Rather he is *almost* an outcast on oneside and on other side has no relevant inheritance so far. I understand author wants to show a competent MC who works hard to gain his skills but so far MC is instead disadvantaged by his unique circumstances. He has limited access to resources and skills. And also his skills feel half baked compared to talented average ninjas shown in original anime. MC is definitely a talented upcoming ninja but so far he is absolutely not special in any way. It just feels unsatisfying because MC has made some good plans but the implementation and skills he has actually achieved are only little above average so far. And to reach this above average level MC hasn't exactly gone through a struggle so the character build up feels misplaced so far.
Nonetheless the story has potential and author doesn't assume readers already know things so I would suggest people to read this story and try it themselves as everyone has different opinions
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This isn't bad. That is genuinely how I feel after reading upto chapter 52. It has an interesting premise and I like the writing style of author a bit because they take the time to describe things at a good pace which I appreciate.
However I also see some obvious shortcomings which can maybe improved in future?
First I feel author posted the rewrite in some hurry because in multiple chapters there are broken sentences, grammar or pronoun issues. Multiple chapters have comments from readers requesting a correction so maybe author will check it.
The MC has a personality similar to brick wall so far. Nothing really interesting to see. Epitome of a neutral character. He is not overly angry, he is not overly social, he isn't overly friendly. He is so balanced out that it feels strange. He really needs to display more stronger emotions of any kind. MC interacts with people the bare minimum as and when necessary else not at all.
Unfortunately this also seems to apply to skills of the MC. The story premise in description indicates MC has 2 amazing bloodlines. But till chapter 52 it has instead turned out that MC is an above average talent but his dual bloodlines offer no significant benefit. Rather he is *almost* an outcast on oneside and on other side has no relevant inheritance so far. I understand author wants to show a competent MC who works hard to gain his skills but so far MC is instead disadvantaged by his unique circumstances. He has limited access to resources and skills. And also his skills feel half baked compared to talented average ninjas shown in original anime. MC is definitely a talented upcoming ninja but so far he is absolutely not special in any way. It just feels unsatisfying because MC has made some good plans but the implementation and skills he has actually achieved are only little above average so far. And to reach this above average level MC hasn't exactly gone through a struggle so the character build up feels misplaced so far.
Nonetheless the story has potential and author doesn't assume readers already know things so I would suggest people to read this story and try it themselves as everyone has different opinions
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