By Snusmumriken
Erf paid the price for his power, even if it was too much. He received a boon, even if it was too great. And now he needs to survive in an alien world while ensuring the safety of his estranged family. As the world will push him deeper and deeper
A fat mountain boy is visited by a jade beauty, and decides to embark on a cultivation quest.
Spelling & Grammar 2/5 - Typos and missed words are fairly common.
Style & Story 3/5 - Fairly bland, aside from the hook things follow standard cultivation expectations. It is reasonably well written and consistent. There is additional emphasis on the interactions between low level cultivators and worldly concerns that lends nuance to the protagonist's exploration of the world. What would otherwise be a banal intro saga, becomes a journey of growth.
Characters 2.5/5 - While the protagonist does not strictly conform to the archetype of cultivation MC's, I am superised at how two dimensional he still seems. He rather reminds me of Son Goku from the original Dragon Ball series. Side characters naturally have even less development as they come and go from the narrative. However, both Sun Xueling and Alisha Patel are characterized relatively well.
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