World Building

The world that the author takes on is one that occasionally will spawn super-dungeons called domains. This is an offshoot of the Isekai into/as a dungeon genre, and the author stands out by creating a supercharged type of dungeon for their MC. The author early on does not go into details about the surrounding lands nor nations/peoples, save for the arch with the adventures around 1/2 into the story (relative to chapter 123). However, the author takes advantage of the undead dungeon trope and uses it as a blank slate to create a fictional kingdom for the MC to revive (the MC imagines anew this kingdom to create a rational story for her subordinates to follow her and as a guide for her to create new subordinates). This, is frankly a wonderful idea that is a strength of this story. The MC creating a "lore" and making it real through the undead's imprinted memories is cool, unique, and refreshing. Around the halfway mark (60?) the story starts to make a substantial change in tone, attention to internal consistency, and lack of clear direction that I will be consistently referring to. In terms of World Building, later chapters starts to expand on both the "lore" of the MC domain and the nations/people outside of her domain, but in ways that seems inconsistent and rushed. Brief examples include:

• Redrick being introduced as an adventurer in order to gather funds/power to retake his families noble titles/lands back in the adventure arch. But in the later chapters he shows up as a governor of a new town based outside the entrance of the domain, with him apparently achieving most of his objectives of revenge with no explanation nor reference.
• The adventure couple with Redrick (I cant remember their names) with a surprising backstory of continuous reincarnation who ask the MC to end their cycle, and alluding to great payment to do so. Then they seem to make a payment that as a reader I did not find significant to remember, and vanished without explanation.
• The dragon god's appearance in her soul realm, where the MC makes a big deal of mentally and physically standing up to and in defiance of said god. But appears to immediately submit and take on the dragon spirit who becomes her daughter with no clear explanation to the reader why she changes her mind.
• The race of lizard-humans ambassador seemingly having a religious awakening by seeing her soul presence, their random request to receive an enclave in the domain but not interact with the MC even with their religious fervor.

These and more were, to me as a reader, ideas and information that were added and forgotten. Perhaps they will be wrapped up and explained latter on, but the pacing of the story was so fast that they were forgotten in the moments written.

Magic System Building

The author spends a great deal of time developing the magic system and rules on its function, in line with general dungeon stories. This story shows a more developed, thought out, and explored system, and the author keeps a nice balance between overpowered system (and overpowered MC) and practical responsibilities of handling said power. The MC can spawn a number of mobs and some raw resources, but physical structures must be build by hand. Dividing of her forces by type and skills in both the early and latter part of the story is well done, and each type of soldier is expanded upon and not left to their generic stereotype. The beginning of the story may have felt too detailed (how much essence needed per weapon) to some, but I was quite happy with that level of explanations. However, it appears that the author has realized that explanations in the detail can slow down the pacing of the story, and they seemed to have abandoned explaining or staying consistent to said system they built. Which is a real shame, since it is a very well developed system with what I can recall as coherent rules that a reader could understand but left enough ambiguity for further advancement as the story develops. Examples of the Magic System being inconsistent are:

• The MC main advisor Kharon being the most powerful mob in the domain, yet never being used in fights nor combat. Why give him a wonderful violin and he never gets to fight with it?
• The assassins coming after Redrick even though Kharon was the only person who could bring people over the death river that was supposedly impassible. And no effort was made to explain how they got in.
• The latest fight were the classroom that the MC daughter left was in different strongholds from where the main base is, but later on the MC daughter walks to said classroom after the fight? This fight felt forced, and several times the author seemed to ignore previous rules. The MC is unable to be aware of hostile forces in her domain, unable to use her map, unable to use her TP. The main zombie being not killed but in a coma was a break from the 2-deaths rule set previously. And the burial instead of cremation of the bodies after the fight is also a break from previous fights.

I will add that Chapter 123 appears to explain that the system is changing, and the reason is due to a kingdom being defined by subjects more than the ruler. However, this doesn't appear to fit with previous descriptions of the system nor the expected upgrade path of said domain.

Plot

I will endeavor to be brief here, but the first half of the story had a clear plot. Spawn mobs, build dungeon in unique undead castle style, gather resources, train soldiers, prepare for adventurous. The latter half, as a reader, I cannot see a clear plot. Is this a continuation of build dungeon, are we transitioning into kingdom building/management, are we pathing towards an inter-dimensional fight with gods, are we settling down into a Isekai slice-of-life romance? As a reader, I am confused with the different ideas thrown at me and only partially explored and left behind. This is where the pacing became key, and I think the author is trying to move too fast and add everything they want.

Personally, I tend to shy away from Girls Love, and as a reader it came as a shock that the novel went this route. I think the author gave the MC an unnecessary relationship and one that detracts, not adds to, the character and story of the MC. I find the romance scenes distracting and so far doesn't appear to build on the central plot, but instead inserts a parallel plot.

Editing

The latest fight was really well written in terms of details, emotions, and perspectives. They story as a whole has generally well detailed descriptions of characters, items, flashbacks, and perspectives of the world. The detailed writing style is a strength of the author. I have generally not noticed nor felt bother by spelling/grammar.

In the latter half of the story, a significant numbers of chapters start with a different perspective from another character, and it not denoted. This was repeatedly ask for by several commenters, and the latest chapters are more clear on who is talking. However, those previous chapters don't have that fixed, and as a reader it is confusing reading dialogue and expose without knowing who is talking.

as her intention entering portal was to start a new life leaving everything  but after some time she wants to go back like every isekai summoned MC, it's comeup few times, but it gives her a depth in emotional character.

or all the characters outside the domain become 2d as their only purpose is to provide MC what she needs or something similar