Fundamentally speaking, I think this story has a lot of potential.     

It introduces a fair bit of worldbuilding and plot points that could have made for a really interesting and engaging story.    

Is it though?   

For me personally, although the concept is interesting, the writing itself falls flat, and the pacing is much too swift. Furthermore, there is waaaay too much exposition and waaaay too much information being given right off the bat.   

In my opinion, readers need to be fed this information more slowly in order for them to properly digest it and in order to build up both the story and any kind of suspense. Here, new things happen in quick succession, new elements and characters being introduced rapidly while giving exposition without allowing the readers proper time to digest it.   

Also, I do find it difficult to become invested in the characters themselves, because I feel that they lack depth.   

The main character, Keristis, is a Summon;

And in theory, both of these characters sound really interesting, but in practice?

I was definitely interested, and now I've lost interest.    

Coming into this, I must admit that I did have certain expectations, having read the synopsis and all. However, I definitely expected something darker, with more suspense and a more sinister tone overall - and more insight into characters and character motivations *outside* of what was said in dialogue, as in "show don't tell" and in "don't dump all this info on me all at once because you're killing the suspense over here."   

So yeah, this is enough for me. Again, it's an interesting concept, but I cannot deal with this execution.  

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