It feels forced. The early chapters had issues with protag and Bonney having caution blown to the wind along with short term memory. And then rather than fleeing what is probably a search zone or keeping their heads down is abandoned for growing a precious resource of significant size over a significant time period. After that, they go past the calm belt with no guarantee that they are strong enough to do so just to go to Amazon Lily. Because they want to get stronger. Later chapters have developed some of the worst english I've seen, but thankfully, the cringe has subsided to where a fanfic should be.
My recommendation: Rewrite the early chapters. I don't care how as long as you can establish believable short term memory.
I really like the concept of an One Piece isekai and I think it's really original. But the MC starts off with cheat items that just take the weight of the story, I can't find one moment where something bad happens since she's just too overpowered.
The interactions between the MC and Bonny are really cute and fluffy in the beginning, but these interactions keep becoming rarer and rarer when others keep being introduced and more time and attention is focused on them. (PS: What happened to the surprise Bonny and Lex where preparing?)
The s*x scenes where kind of dull and don't have allot of details but they are okay for someone who never made any. It also annoying that Lily just lets others force her to have s*x with them while the romantical interests have been left untouched s*xual and romantical.
I want more of this story! This story is about the protagonist Lily who wakes in the world of One Piece with only her anime knowledge! You see Lily's views change over time and her interactions are so enjoyable! The author does a great job incorporating the One Piece timeline and gives life to the characters of One Piece. If you like character building and a story of your favorite Anime this is one of them!
How’s life after reincarnating as a dragon princess? Slow, peaceful, lots of food, cute girlfriend, and I even get to live as a girl! There’s just one slight problem, one teeny-tiny little problem: I’M SO BORED!! Yeah sure, a cal
In a distant world where magic and monsters coexist, Luna, once a human, has been reincarnated as a dragon and has now witnessed thousands of years passing by. Circumstances have made her one of the few, or perhaps the only, dragon alive. This has
It feels forced. The early chapters had issues with protag and Bonney having caution blown to the wind along with short term memory. And then rather than fleeing what is probably a search zone or keeping their heads down is abandoned for growing a precious resource of significant size over a significant time period. After that, they go past the calm belt with no guarantee that they are strong enough to do so just to go to Amazon Lily. Because they want to get stronger. Later chapters have developed some of the worst english I've seen, but thankfully, the cringe has subsided to where a fanfic should be.
My recommendation: Rewrite the early chapters. I don't care how as long as you can establish believable short term memory.
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I really like the concept of an One Piece isekai and I think it's really original. But the MC starts off with cheat items that just take the weight of the story, I can't find one moment where something bad happens since she's just too overpowered.
The interactions between the MC and Bonny are really cute and fluffy in the beginning, but these interactions keep becoming rarer and rarer when others keep being introduced and more time and attention is focused on them. (PS: What happened to the surprise Bonny and Lex where preparing?)
The s*x scenes where kind of dull and don't have allot of details but they are okay for someone who never made any. It also annoying that Lily just lets others force her to have s*x with them while the romantical interests have been left untouched s*xual and romantical.
Read More
I want more of this story! This story is about the protagonist Lily who wakes in the world of One Piece with only her anime knowledge! You see Lily's views change over time and her interactions are so enjoyable! The author does a great job incorporating the One Piece timeline and gives life to the characters of One Piece. If you like character building and a story of your favorite Anime this is one of them!
Read More