By LittleHelp
Slaying the Ancient Evil? Theora would rather sleep.
The System is displeased with its strongest Heroine, because Theora keeps putting off completing her Main Quest. And when she finally arrives to meet the Ancient Evil, it introduces herse
First off, this story is not for everyone. Mainly because the MC physically abuses people for fun.
Secondly, this review is not for the faint of heart. Because I mentally abuse people for fun.
With that out of the way, let's get into it.
Writing: Decent. 3.8 stars for that. Good imagery in some areas, lacking description in some parts. Chapter 2 is an info dump, it basically just
provides a few paragraphs explanation of the game, it's just a generic school nobility kind of story, MC is the villainess of the story whose engaged to the game's male lead, female lead is a commoner, etc. There's combat and drama and the story arc lasts a year.
Story: eh. 3.5 stars. There is the info dump as mentioned and the MC talks about stuff from their viewpoint a lot which is really just telling over showing. The one difference between this and other generic stories is that the MC likes to hit people and really doesn't value human life all that much.
Characters... 2.5. Because of C1. And partially C5.
C1:
So in this chapter, MC talks a bit about her other life before she woke up as the game character. She liked girls, supposedly did not receive much attention to the point where she outed herself as a lesbian (in a homophobic world) -- maybe author could've expanded on her being neglected or something, it just sounded stupid because it's kind of like saying you like the British in the 1750s US-- what did you expect would happen? But that's just me nitpicking, here's what I didn't like:
So she outs herself for attention. And she gets bullied. And she likes it because she's receiving attention... So I thought she was an M.
But chapter 1 and later chapters basically say she's an S. She wants to understand pain, she wants to inflict it onto others. And I think this change is like, partially expanded on but not enough to explain the things she says/does. The bullying is treated like an afterthought, like it didn't hurt all that much. Where's the fall into despair, into madness? The author's gone and put in the beginning and end, but taken holes out of the middle.
"I hated the pain. The cigarettes were the worst of it, leaving soot marks and ash prints on my arms and thighs. But the looks on their faces... was it happiness? Euphoria? I wanted that too. I deserved it, to take it from them, and mess them up as they had done to me. Thin red lines, oozing with blood. Faces full of tears, throats hoarse from screaming. Marred beyond repair, yet the prettiest in the world." Something like that.
Chapter 5:
A series of awful events occur to the maid who doesn't seem to care all that much and it turns out she's an M.
Even for me, this is just weird. Like real convenient for the story I guess.
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