Dale Mitchell, your average guy in a below-average job. But, what happens to him is anything but average. After hitting someone in his truck, his world was turned upside down, inside out, and more than fifty shades of grey.
Now, he seems to be something called a World Keeper, and must create and manage his own world. Is this his afterlife, or something else entirely?
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- It has a nice idea, but everything about the execution is dissapointing.
Imagine reading a summary of the history of the world and its development in a generic fantasy novel, but without of the specifics. That's pretty much what this novel is, apart from when the dude interacts with the keeper community, which isn’t that often.
No plot. No creative worldbuilding. No intrigue. No interesting characters. No interesting world system. No humor or banter between characters. No exploration or development.
This has a lot of potential for cool stuff, but sticks to the generic ideas from other fantasy novels. Generic isn’t bad necessarily, but this one kind of leans on the generic ideas so it doesn’t have to put too much work into it. There’s not much description of the cultures and how they change, nor how different societies are developing different. The most you get is one race built a big city, another built many cities, one has lots of war, one explores, one has outlier subraces that are excluded, one has many tribes of closely related races. That’s about all of the description you get. Like how would the development of tools differ for centaurs vs elves vs humans vs beastkin vs dwarves? What cultural aspect would differ? What about their architecture? Like seriously, all of the worldbuilding details in this novel are left out.
Imagine one of those annoying MC's from the seasonally harem anime. That's this MC. Average intelligence. Dense. No hobbies or really any definite personality traits. Easily pushed around by women, but for some reason is normal vs men. No goals in life other than to live comfortably. Never thinks things through. No defining traits so one can easily imagine themselves in his place. Like he’s not a "bumbling idiot", but he's definitely below average.
If I had to give you genres for this novel, it would be Fantasy and Slice of Life. There is no romance, no comedy, no adventure, and definitely no action. The MC's setting his gods personalities to love his is not romance.
How is this the #1 novel on this site? If you disagree with what I've said, please write a review about it. I'd really like to know if this novel is worth reading through a bunch of boring chapters at the start. Like when does it get good if it does? What keeps you reading? Is the start just bad but the novel picks up later on? I really tried to at least read 10% of this novel before posting a review, but I couldn’t stand it anymore after he just randomly gave the gods new domains without thinking at all about what changes it could make.
I'll apologize in advance to the people that are angered by this review, but this novel just frustrated me so much that I couldn't phrase it in a more positive and neutral point of view. Maybe I just got my hopes up.
An interesting premise with cliche execution and total lack of tension.
I really tried to stick at least to half of the released chapters, but nothing happens and I got frustrated.
The fact that the MC is building a Tolkien/RPG game is not good, but forgivable.
The actual problem is that the MC is just randomly developing his world without goal or meaning to it. While there is a possible treat of interdimensional battles, there isn't a time counter for that. He just keeps adding stuff (mostly expository systems and magic) that has no actual use in the story overall.
It's exposition for sake of exposition. All the information isn't used anywhere else in the plot and he just keeps adding more and more.
There's no conflict between the characters except the godesses calling him dumb for his unreasonable changes in the world, and as a lot ppl have commented, the MC is not really that bright or likeable. There's also neither danger not challenge that forces the characters to get out of their confort zone. They're all omnipotent, after all.
There's not even drama... I just can't see why a novel that tells no story and has no tension or challenge is at first place.
It starts out quite promising, but gets bogged down, progression is extremely slow and the characters are simply like cardboard tropes which makes the slow pace unbearable, both in terms of character progression and plot progression. Enjoyed the beginning, but dropped it after pushing myself to see what's the scenario with the keeper battle and being disappointed.
It was good at the start, but quality dropped really hard after a while.
A lot of the other reviews mentioned these points, so I'm just going to summarize my take on them. MC is an idiot who would probably make a mess and die within a few days of being left alone to manage the world. The first Goddess/Companion is trash that doesn't try to actively help the MC without him prompting the conversations and arbitrarily does things on her own to affect the world.
The premise of the MC having his own sandbox-like world and creating it anew is very interesting, a nice change from all the boring and cliche reincarnation/ Isekai novels.
The initial execution was good and really kept me wanting to read more. After a while, that however changed to some frustration with the incompetence of the MC. Despite his disposition being towards creativity and innovation, it seems that couldn't be further from the truth. It honestly seems like he is also bipolar with his character. Sometimes he acts on his own and does things without consulting more experienced individuals, and at other times he is a beta henpecked by his first companion.
Then there is the first companion. Her character is quite bad in my opinion. She is supposed to be his guide in the whole Keeper thing but she doesn't take the initiative to teach him things. There are supposed rules in place that stop her from telling him everything, but she only tells him about things when he asks her about them. Over the course of the chapters I've read she drip-feeds him information when she could just as easily make a handbook or guide on the things he needs to know. She also does quite a few things to affect the world, mostly favoring the beastkin she is in charge of, without telling the MC about it, and then she gets mad when he does things without telling her, the hypocrisy in her actions is quite stupid, especially considering that he wouldn't be doing stupid sh*t without her if she gave him more essential information.
Most of my misgivings about the novel comes from the main characters. The plot itself is interesting and I would really like to see where it goes, but with a main cast of characters this bad I've really lost my motivation to keep reading, since I would just get frustrated again after a while and come to hate the whole novel itself, and not just the characters in it.
Some of the new goddesses that the MC creates for his "harem" also have a variety of terrible personalities. Its honestly not even a harem since the MC is henpecked by the first goddess into only being with her, but wait, there's more hypocrisy incoming.
The first goddess goes on to kiss and have s*x with the elf goddess he creates, and later says its okay if MC also 'plays' with the elf, as long as they share
Overall, the novel was an interesting idea with quite a good execution on world building and the plot in general. However, in my opinion the main cast of characters was appalling. I've read a substantial amount of novels throughout the past few years, whether they be Japanese light or web novels, Korean novels, Chinese novel or amateur novels on this site, and I honestly have to say that this cast of characters was one of the worst that I've had to put up with in quite a while.
I know I haven't read most of the novel, but going by the other reviews, it doesn't seem like the problems are likely to go away further into the story.
The concept is honestly great, and at first, the execution was too. However, after a certain point, the quality of the story started to drop significantly. It goes from a fast-forwarding nationbuilding story where we get glimses of important people's lives as the generations go by, to a slife of life-esque story about a bumbling idiot constantly f**king up and a set of goddesses with over-exaggerated personalities trying to keep things in order.
Now, that might be an exaggeration, but it gets the point across. What is definitely the most glaring flaw for me is the fact that the protaganist appears to be what can only be described as incompetent. He keeps making mistakes that could easily be avoided if he were to just stop for a second and think about the possible consequences of his actions or consult with others. And what is worse is that he doesn't learn from them. Every wrong action is at most followed by him going whoops, possibly attemping to fix it, and moving on - immidiately to be followed by another mistake. I mean, he litterally has a companion build for the exact purpose of being his guide and assisting him to make the best decisions using the available information, yet he keeps thoughtlessly doing things on his own.
As for the rest of the goddesses, the first few were honestly fine. They had reasonable personalities as would be expected of sentient beings. But as he gave more goddesses personalities, they started to become more and more over the top, ending up completely outside of how any sane person would behave, reducing them to overused tropes that add nothing of significance to the story.
Really, the overall concept and worldbuilding are interesting and the beginning parts of the story are great, with none of the aforementioned flaws. The protaganist recorgnizes that he is new and needs guidance and his only companion has a realistic personality, but as the story goes on, the flaws start to appear. If you can ignore the dump decisions and odd personalities, it is probably a great story. However, for me, the flaws are just too annoying for me to enjoy the story.
I am actually writing this in order to counter a previous review I thought was more than a little unfair from someone who had not read on long enough to see that their stance on the matter was completely false.
The accusation in question was that the MC was a "bumbling idiot who doesn't learn from his mistakes." Well, from my experience, there was only one mistake the MC made that I really felt was contrived or outside of what I could imagine anyone in the MC's situation reasonably doing. Most of his mistakes are very understandable given the situation and the lack of awareness the average person has.
It strikes me the reviewer in question may be used to the 2 dimensional flat protagonists most fantasy isekai web-novels feature. The MC here is no Kirito from SAO or Sato from Death March. He is a realistically flawed character, and he does indeed learn from his mistakes and become better at what he does as the series goes on.
However, it does require him to make one pretty big mistake for which he is sat down and given something of an intervention by the goddesses for before he starts really shaping up. The mistake in question is the one I described as seeming a little contrived. This is not because it's not a mistake I wouldn't believe a real person making, it's because it's a mistake I couldn't see this character making.
I actually love the story it was starting to get a little bland but I didn't really mind, but it's ruined with the main character and side characters.
First off the main character. He was fine first in all honesty pretty relatable and then his first creation comes and *again* ruins it. Even those he's suppose to be the ruler of his world he lets his female creations walk all over him. Giving in to their demands no matter what. Which I don't really care about but, only to a certain point. Terra (His first creation for those who haven't read the story) told him early on that should didn't want him to have a haram and for her to be the only one. Which again fine I personally don't really like harems so if anything that's a good thing.
That is until chapter 45
He creates a new goddess which as soon as she gets her personality kisses both main character and then Terra before Terra can get mad at her. Afterwards Terra and new goddess so Terra can teach new goddess her job. Later MC goes to the new goddess room to find Terra naked and passed out on her bed while new goddess is reading a book... the new goddess explains that they had fun after Terra finished showing her what to do and say's Terra says its fine if MC and new goddess has fun as long as she's there too. in a sense Terra wants MC to only be with her but doesn't hold herself to those same standers... She pretty much cheats on the MC (not sure if they are actually in a relationship but considering how terra early comments they pretty much are or might as well be in one) and debatably the worst part the MC.... does nothing.... not a single thing he doesn't get mad or anything of the sort instead tells them there's a meeting with them and his other goddess. While its yuri and maybe the MC doesn't see it as cheating she's still a hypocrite and had s*x with someone behind his back and the only reason he found out is because he walked in on it. To top it off the very next chapter another one of his creation gets mad at him and instead of auguring back or anything he just apologizes
tl;dr the MC is a cuck that lets his creations do whatever he wants even if they threaten him and, the main character besides him is a hypocrite
in the beginning it was quite fun but the quality dropped pretty drastically. He, well, isn't really the brightest, he doesn't have any aspirations whatsoever and the worst fact is that he is really spineless and submissive towards his own gods... Honestly, if I were in his position and some random goddess of battle dared to show any signs of hostility towards me, i'd instantly obliterate her. No questions asked, obey or die. That is the style a god, or in this case keeper, should have. Gods are above all and to make a god as spineless and cowardly as Dale is just ridiculous... I mean seriously, random battle goddess threatened to rip your entire creation apart and what did you do? APOLOGIZE TO HER?! wtf, that is not the behaviour of a god, just sad how dumb this so-called "smart guy" is... I'd suggest you overhaul the entire goddess harem and republish the story, this time with the protagonist actually having/developing the bearing of a god...
The story is ok. The premise is very good and interesting, with many possibilities. World building, from the ground up, is a cool idea. And when that becomes boring, trying a different world type. And when that is boring, fighting other worlds. All of this while analyzing the mechanics of the worlds and energy usage.
For me, the large stain in this beautiful idea is the MC. It starts with the idea that the MC is an average Joe, who was thrust into building worlds. Which is good, but the bad part is how uninterested he is in the worlds he is building.
All he really does is ask for the gods and goddesses opinions (wanting a harem), and doing them, while not having any motivation himself.
And when he literally has access to higher powers like magic, ki, chakra, natural, spiritual, and divinity, he is only slightly interested. Altogether (up to chapter 210) he spends only a couple of months trying to figure out the powers, out of the several millenia that his worlds have existed for. He loses interest in learning his abilities once it becomes slightly difficult, while the gods and goddesses under him have spent millenia and almost a hundred mortal incarnations in understanding their crafts.
HE IS JUST LAZY. He has the ability to improve his mind using a technique for chakra control, and he got bored of a month of trying to learn it, and stops. He has access to knowledge about spiritual and natural energy control, and he just doesn't try to learn it because "it gave him a headache".
So my overall review is that it is a great premise that is almost ruined because of the annoying MC.
Hmmm, it's kinda hard to judge this novel. I think it's a really great concept but badly executed. I read until ch541 because I thought the world was interesting and the idea of building different worlds with different themes is very atractive, but the character personalities don't progress.
At this point in the novel (ch541), there's basically 0 interecation between the Keeper and the Gods, the protagonist only calls then when he needs something. The gods at this point spend more time with mortals that they like than managing their domains, a lot of problems later on are created by that in my opinion...
I feel like the author went wrong somewhere, the gods where said to be a family but they're not even friends at this point. The romance plot is badly executed aswell. It feels like Terra and Rione have no reason to like Dale, and they don't spend time together so there's really no intimacy. Don't even get me started on the romance between Irene and Dale. They kissed 2-3 times in 541 chapters and nothing else, even though they both like each other. Every 200 chapters there's one ch where they spend time together...
The keeper trials (in the yearly meeting) was totally forgotten on the second meeting he participated wich is very disappointing.
The point system is praticly forgotten too, he has 100k+ points but doesn't buy anything wich is kinda annoying but can be excused I guess...
Now that the rant is over, i'll give me personnal opinion in what I think should be changed to make a better novel (keep in mind this is my opinion and I'm not a professional only normal reader :P).
1- Better character development for the gods
2- Less different POVs, we don't give a damn about the random guy that's discovering a new world nor the chick who's about to become a false goddes (god), no more 5 different POVs in the same chapter please
3- Better romance, obviously...
4- Maybe less interecation between gods and mortals, it feels like they don't do their job anymore. I mean earth almost died (the earth spirit) because Bihena and Accalia where doing whatever the f**k they were doing...
PS: It was a aquatic monster, Bihena is the goddes of the Ocean and Accalia goddes of the hunt. Accalia has shown multiple times to know when a dangerous monster is born and Bihena should have full knowledge of the Oceans...
5- A stronger Dale. It was very anti-climatic the end of the last invasion... He's all like I'm gonna kill you all and then summons the gods and spends the whole fight speaking with Terra while the gods kill the invaders, very disappointing... It's not very hard to get him stronger, he could just buy a few manuals from the shop for Chakra and the Shadow energy and maybe a few full skills like 10k Arms, 100k threads and make a new skill for himself, idk...