An Undead In The Multiverse
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4.7 (3 ratings)
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Synopsis
Read as Axton, Our MC gets embroiled in an Eldritch God's plans which somehow fails leading to this fun..? journey.
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This is my first novel. So, do give feedback that will help me improve.
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Disclaimer: I do not own Deadman Wonderland or any anime.
Genre
ActionAdventureFanfictionMartial ArtsDeadman Wonderland Demon Slayer Naruto One Piece- Chapter 14Apr 17, 2024
- Chapter 13Apr 13, 2024
- Chapter 12Apr 11, 2024
- Chapter 11Apr 8, 2024
- Chapter 10Apr 7, 2024
- Chapter 9Apr 6, 2024
- Chapter 8Apr 4, 2024
- Chapter 7Apr 3, 2024
- Chapter 6Apr 2, 2024
- Chapter 5Apr 1, 2024
- Chapter 4Mar 31, 2024
- Chapter 3Mar 30, 2024
- Chapter 2Mar 29, 2024
- Chapter 1Mar 28, 2024
Table of Contents
This is a weird one ngl, though enjoyable read. First starting with the good points:
-This is a Deadman Wonderland fic, that means Shiro is in it. A favorite character of mine of all time and that means I am gonna read this story.
-The grammar is good, no spelling errors and sentences makes sense.
Now the bad, it is only one big thing: As of chapter 7 the story feels very rushed. It feels like random things are happening randomly all the time.
The best example of this is when the girl by the fake name of Akeno appears. First there is an earthquake. Then MC tries to help Akeno. Then he gets kidnaped by her brother. Then a random man enters and kills the brother. Then MC kills the killer. Then runs away, jumps in the ocean, gets infected and a 10 year time skip. What the hell is happening ? Who is the girl ? What is purpose of her appearance ?
All in all it feels like the author is trying to rush to the next arc and finish the intro. I would like to see a slower pace. Add more descriptions, more planning on what the MC is gonna do instead of things just happening.
Now with the next arc it would also be good opportunity to add more interactions/dialogues with other characters (especially Shiro, shamelessly requesting).
Anyways keep up the good work. There are very little deadman fics out there, I wish you the best.
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