I just finished reading your anthology, I was drawn in by the cover art which is very visually pleasing and the title.
I feel the poems are written as though you are addressing emotions but not feeling them so they seem shallow and wooden to me. I read them and overall they were missing the jagged edges of angst and also the euphoric heights one feels when they are in love. The feeling of being thrown in an abyss from the heavens so to speak.
"I miss you" is repetitive and I feel I have read the same type poem before or in a card.I think you formatted them well there are only a few grammatical mistakes, the poems are well written technically. The poems unfortunately didn't evoke an emotional response from me. I cried no tears for your plight, no shared elation. "Apollo and Daphne"seemed contrived for some shock value I did laugh a bit.
My reading left me with just this is allright vibe in the end though."Flowers in the Sky" was my favorite until I reached the end.I was really loving the imagery but in the verse
Are we like those flowers?
...........
So large and explosive
And if so, does that make us
:Feeble..?Weak...?
Seems contradictory. I think it would have been perfect if you ended it the verse before this one
. In conclusion, I wish you luck and hope you continue to grow as a poet!
I just finished reading your anthology, I was drawn in by the cover art which is very visually pleasing and the title.
I feel the poems are written as though you are addressing emotions but not feeling them so they seem shallow and wooden to me. I read them and overall they were missing the jagged edges of angst and also the euphoric heights one feels when they are in love. The feeling of being thrown in an abyss from the heavens so to speak.
"I miss you" is repetitive and I feel I have read the same type poem before or in a card.I think you formatted them well there are only a few grammatical mistakes, the poems are well written technically. The poems unfortunately didn't evoke an emotional response from me. I cried no tears for your plight, no shared elation. "Apollo and Daphne"seemed contrived for some shock value I did laugh a bit.
My reading left me with just this is allright vibe in the end though."Flowers in the Sky" was my favorite until I reached the end.I was really loving the imagery but in the verse
Are we like those flowers?
...........
So large and explosive
And if so, does that make us
:Feeble..?Weak...?
Seems contradictory. I think it would have been perfect if you ended it the verse before this one
. In conclusion, I wish you luck and hope you continue to grow as a poet!
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