An avid user of Mental Magic, and a cripple who likes iced coffee.
Tne older sister of Kenneth, Lena possesses a luscious body and a bright personality to go with it.
A user of Light Magic.
The oldest of the three siblings, Lucas is your typical gym junkie who spends most of his time training his body in his room.
He prefers to rely on his brawn to get things done without thinking of the consequences. Also a sucker for his dog, Tyrone.
The family dog. Tyrone's breed is that of a King's Guardian, who are well known to be protective of their "kings".
A user of Earth Magic, and Kenneth's favorite buddy.
The mother of Kenneth. She is known to be caring to her children, and is the ideal housewife.
Lena supposedly inherited her body from Mikaela's own seductive figure.
The father of Kenneth. Having more lust than normal people, he usually takes it out on his wife late in the night.
Despite this, he is a caring father and can be strict when necessary.
<This review is meant as a constructive critic towards improvement.>
Right off the bat, What could be described of the room from where the almost deathly voice came was, dark. Read this sentence out loud, it's painful, this could be in an active voice instead, to give more power to the type of narrative. HunterxHunter is a great example of something to learn with.
With a powerful tool such as the narrator, especially in the way the author decided to go about this novel, it is to be expected to avoid the MC speak things like the second part of this sentence.
"Err... right. I guess I'll just go off what little information I can remember. My memory has deteriorated over time, so I'll try to be as specific as I can." The later half is an example of what the narrator must say.
See you tomorrow." Michael bid goodbye to Lopez, who had already entered the elevator. -> See you tomorrow, " Michael bid goodbye to Lopez, who had already entered the elevator.
If same person as the one doing the action you do, " if not."
Chapter 2: The beginning of chapter 2
Krodoa was such a heavy info dump that most readers would tell you, "show don't tell." You could've made a little scene as a baby and connect the dots through a book, or the MC sneaking on a lesson to the older sister as he crawled or something. You'd earn a lot more points that way in grabbing the reader's attention.
And besides, I might be able to learn a thing or too from you."
Chapter 3:
"Good morning, Mother." Upon reaching the kitchen, Kenneth greeted his mother, who was preparing breakfast. "Good morning, you two. Just a minute, I'm almost done with cooking. Lena, dear, could you help me prepare the plates?" Mikaela called Lena, who was playing with Kenneth's hand. (You have this tendency to repeat through narration what the characters say.) Also, "you two" needs a, <upon her son words, she looked at them with a kind smile, having both her hands busy with preparing breakfast. Thus, she glanced at Lena who seemed free, watching her playing with her brother's hand. "Good morning you two. Lena, dear, could you help me prepare the plates?"
"Right away, Mom. Oh, we're having bacon and eggs, my favorite!"
Overall: Overly done with passive voice, typos here and there, misuse of punctuation. Mix of past and present verbs in the same sentence outside dialogue. 3/5* but nothing that a good edit won't fix.
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It is an isekai that has been done in a 90s TV show format. We get a narrator that can be felt and an MC that has a series of unfortunate events. As isekais go, it is nothing groundbreaking, but it is well-written with plenty of description, so, I have to give it that.
The MC is a good guy that values family in both of his lives. The author is emphasizing brains vs brawls, with the MC being a member of the brains team, in both lives. Also, the MC is blind. Which makes me wonder how he reads books and the like... maybe magic? I am sure the author would eventually answer this question in a future chapter.
Anyway, it is light-hearted and fun, with many scenes that are shown and not told. (I just can't stress that one enough.) An isekai reader's cup of tea, or iced coffee, in this novel's case.
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