its good, realy, just the time for update that sucks, but its a new kind of MC (for me), and its not a idiot with harem seeking tag, I like harem, but when you put a harem seeking protagonist with single digit for IQ, loses the fun, I recomend this if you can do faster updates, I think your fanfic gonna be one of the best ones, thx for fanfiction author

PS: English its not my lenguage, learned english playing online games and dont know verbs and etc.... 

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Plot is fine, but the grammar of early chapters is concerning, I don't know yet if it gets better later on but the author don't seem to plan on updating these

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First and foremost the grammar of the first 15 or so chapters is really bad. That said, the author has clearly made severe improvements and that deserves recognition. I would hope that they eventually rewrite the those earlier chapters, but if that never happens I would say anyone read this try and push passed those earlier chapters. As of chapter 62 the grammar still isn't perfect, but is in a much more readable state then where it started.

Grammar aside this story is interesting enough to be rated a 3 bordering on 4 star, so why the 2 star rating?

This story is interesting for the plot elements it introduces, unfortunately nigh all of them are explored to a subpar degree. The most prominent example being the MC themselves. The title would lead you to infer their blindness plays a substantial role in the story. In actuality it just means every single character he meets makes a comment about it, and the MC himself has abilities that without the constant reminder from other characters would make you forget he's blind. This is furthered by the narration coming from a third person view and rarely a first person view, so there are very few times where we actually experience what he experiences. Most importantly though the author clearly hasn't made an attempt to research what life is like as a blind person, and every now and then there's a line of dialogue or narration that shows that. 

Second to how the author manages the characterization of the main character, the author also makes changes to the world of Danmachi. That by itself is a great thing, writing is no easy task and its impressive and interesting to see authors make changes. That said the changes the authors should have deep ramifications, yet they are only immersed with to extent of effecting the MC and no one else. 

Last but not least the MC has no goal. His initial goal was to become an adventurer, which he accomplished within the first few chapters. Since then he's been repeating the events of bell (which is fine), but he's been doing so without a goal explicitly being said or even implied.

All in all I do think this story has a lot of potential, I think the system is bold and the template portion is different from many other systems I've seen. 

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