Id rate this story a 9/10. Its a fun Kingdom builder, however we dont know yet where the plot will ultimately go. What I like most is that it tries to treat its circumstances and mechanics in a realistic way. The two things to critic are the grammar/spelling and the somewhat inconsistent MC. For the grammar/spelling it is pretty obvieus that the author is not a native english speaker. Its very readable but some words and some grammar is just plain wrong. Its only a minor issue, ive read worse. For the inconsistent MC, well the author slowly builds up that the MC becomes a bit more (cruel?) desensitized? Over time. Basically MC is no longer a Human and over time starts to no longer have human morals. (Example: She doesnt see a cute bird as cute anymore only as a threat or EXP to be harvested) This culminates in a chapter where MC is in a monologue about not really careing anymore about the wellbeeing of some kobolds MC saved about 20 chapters earlier by giving them food. This all makes sense from mc's character development etc. But then randomly the author does a almost 180 in this department. MC for no reason continues to help the Kobolds to preserve whats left of her "Humanity" even tho MC 1-3 chapters earlier came to the conclusion that she no longer has humanity and thats fine. Its just a bit inconsistent. I think author did this to appease some people that dont like dark stories. In my opinion the better approch than to appease those people and somewhat waste about ~10 chapters of buildup would have been to just see it through to its conclusion. Also be aware that there are way more dark stories out there than an MC that doesnt care about some members of another species. I was not under the impression that MC was about to go and genocide them, just no longer actively help them as soon as they provided no more benefit to the hive.

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Gryfish

Status: chapter 37

Mar 14, 2024

The MC gets twisted from a good moral character to a vindictive phyco who tortures and murders for experiments and because there is no use anymore. I rate 0 stars if possible just garbage the idea of a bee MC not junk this story junk. Don't let the name and pretty picture fool you this is a DARK story. 18+

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Michoucast

Status: chapter 27: growing family

Feb 20, 2024

The story is too slow paced, on a too little scale, and chapters seems like filers because it has little incidence. The rest is good but it's style of writing is not adapted to my taste. Maybe skipping or reducing some parts to make a moving story ?

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hanck95

Status: chapter 31: the royalty

Feb 13, 2024

Darie my criticism and analysis as short as possible but also explained

Characters

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until now I liked, at least they are well "characterized", although the protagonist (Hana) the first chapters goes between the "reasonable" and the "exaggerated" quite, predominating the "exarate".

But it can be overlooked since the focus is changed to other things.

The other characters, for the themes of what is (bees; soldier, workers, etc, etc.) are fine, they are well characterized, with the majority of scentric personalities, but it can be attributed to the "connection" with their mother.

The brief look at the temple, well, the Holy another "eccentric" character and the cardinal a poor unfortunate (I think it was). I guess it's still a bit soon to mention more in detail about characters.

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narrative

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It is narrated mainly from the point of view of the protagonist, her "train of thought" is well marked and his personality/character makes it insufferable sometimes, the narrative is well done.

To a greater extent, development is "natural" with its high ups and downs for the protagonist's catering (but within the reasonable, I did not see something so exaggerated that I took out of the ingration of history)

advances in time, the chapters and their content have the events, information and development well mrcados, neither slow nor fast and with the beginning and end of the chapter satisfaction.

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Argument

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The main argument (nucleus) promises and seems interesting, another story of reincarnation, yes, but I find it interesting the theme "hive of insects" only that from another approach.

Also of the background of the demon king and his "corruption", the "profession" of the temple and the attempt to survive the protagonist. The "argument" is clear, it only remains to see the "historians" in the plot arches or plots of the future... It is only to see development or how history evolves.

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general impression

I like history and development as the world seems interesting.

As long as there is no moment of "for the combination of the script", something will force or exaggerate And the story continues to develop, it will be a pleasant reading.

[about "for the combination of the script, the greatest example that I can give serious as those "harem" stories of fast falling in love, "couple" where all are their "wives" and tolerate between Yes, etc. for putting a clear example, although I have other examples of the action gender].

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