The universe gave me another chance after life screwed me over. My second life brought me to a world where people breath fire, walk on water and some people with special eyes that give them bullsh#t powers. Well, I got the gamer ability. And I’m gonna use it to stand at the peak. But it's gonna be a long journey before I reach that summit. SI - MC.
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The story is okay-ish. Protag wants to be the strongest to be free, understandable but classic and unoriginal. Might as well have no goal at all for all the difference it makes. Also suffers from holding the occasional idiot ball for no particular reason. On the up-side protag isn't either completely clueless, nor is he a sociopathic murder-hobo as is too often the case in fanfics.
The game system is average, classic Gamer System that is poorly understood by both the protag AND the author himself. On the upside at least it's not sentient and there's no Party sub-system (yet?).
The writing is above average. Few to no typos or grammar issues but lots and lots of clues that the author doesn't really re-read his own work as some the few that exist and a lot of plot points just come up two, three, or even four time in a row. Might not be an issue if reading the chapters one per week, but reading the story in one go makes it very flagrant.
The setting itself is solid so far, no AU weirdness aside from necessary (and admittedly interesting) OC characters, and most named characters are generally faithful to their canon personality (the exception being pre-massacre Sasuke who somehow inherited a big chunk of his post-massacre personality...).
The setting magic chakra is also generally faithful to Shippuuden Naruto Lore, and the story's pace is, while maybe a bit slow for some, entirely within the realm of reasonable so you'll actually want to read each chapter.[edit] some strange AU weirdness has been added in Genjutsu, seemingly for the express purpose of nerfing protag and his Gamer Mind immunity to mind alterations.
Generally a solid if un-exceptional Naruto fanfic.
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It's honestly really good, even if the MC is a bit OP by the start of the 'canon' start of Naruto.
Now there is some stuff that could definitely be improved. The way the Author writes long fights, the Flashbacks and random skips to different POVs, along with the MC power scaling.
As for medium duration fights (fights that encompass 5 chapter), there super nice, not to long winded and not to short. The way the Author explains them really makes you feel like your along side them and feel the rush of adrenaline when something happens to the MC or other characters.
The same can't be said for some of the more recent chapters/fights. They feel to long and tedious to read, and are made 10x worse by the constant flashbacks and POV changes. And this is coming from a person who binged this whole story in about 4 days; I read though everything, I don't mind longer explanations when it comes to important stuff, these last chapter have fell like the Author doesn't trust the reader to know about Naruto (the series), the characters and there motives.
The whole graduation day is to long and to boring to read though, the constant POV changes and flashbacks are done is such a terrible manner that it makes is harder to read. There is no fluidity in those chapters, every time you hit a flashback or a POV change you get whiplash.
My advise is to just skip those chapters and jump to chapter 276.
And if your wonder if you'll miss anything important, then don't worry you will not. Every thing gets explained again in then next chapters.
As for the power scaling of the MC, it staring to reach the point of him becoming too OP.
This may be fine considering what most people want from a story like this, slight spoilers up ahead.
Okay, so what I mean is that he is at a level where he can defeat Kakashi easily if he when all out, by the start of Naruto canon. I just hope this wont lead to any making to villains' way more powerful just to compinsate for the MC strength. He's already pushing some characters towards that. *Cough**Cough* Chapter 279 & 280 *Cough**Cough*
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The story is ok the MC isn't reckless or show off and plans ahead, there's only 2 good naruto fan fics on this site and this is one of them I hope the story extends to boruto timeline because most authors stop at Shippuden (I didn't watch boruto but i'd like to see what author would do, I bet some authors would make a better story than the original)
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The story is good
The author story telling is good
But addition of mana causing me to give 3
So read it if you dont mind messed up power system it will be worth it
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It's not a good story. Not at all. It follows the series example in a weird way, as it's heavy with filler chapters and unnecessary flashbacks. The MC is supposedly smart, but still does the most dumb things constantly. Succeeds of course anyway, with ultra mega enchanted mithril plot armor.
If you have literally nothing else better to do with your time, it's at least better than watching paint dry.
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The best thing about this novel is author's consistency, 3-4 times a week! Can you imagine fanfic with that schedule?! Plus a decent amount of words/chapter. Although in the beginning there was a problem with certain parts of the story could be fit in a single chapter. It wasn't a big deal later on
MC was normal dude get an in Naruto world with a gamer system. The nice thing about it was author did a great job at making a logical and believable OC in Naruto verse. I can totally believe MC got created by original Mangaka.
Story wise it pretty much followed the original timeline except a few minor differences in the beginning. There was some extra foreshadow that author put in the story that I hope can turn to a good climax.
I hope author put more twist to the story. I know it was a hard thing to do balancing between the original plot that we know we are like but predictive and new things that doesn't guarantee we gonna like.
Just to make simple suggestions. We need a proper OC villain! A lot of great character have their own nemesis to make best story! Joker and batman, harry potter and Voldemort, Sherlock Holmes and James Moriarty, Luke Skywalker and Darth Vader
With a great villain there will always be a crisis to face, a great way to make readers wonder, and this concept is close with canon concept (Madara got a ton of hype behind his reveal)
In conclusion, I am just a satisfied reader that saw a lot of potential in your work! I hope you can grow :)
Just do your best
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I have to say this is one of the best naruto fanfics I have ever come across although the pace of the story is very slow it makes up by its interesting story and world building I really like that there are chapters that show what is happening around the world and shows that the MC is not the center of the world goodjob to you my kind sir/maam
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A very good work that develops the story and characters in an incredible way, excellent dialogues and great fights. A little boring in my view the statistics and marbles, but with time their participation decreases and the story improves a lot. Congratulations to the author!!!
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