STUBBED - THIS STORY IS COMPLETE AND HAS MOVED TO AMAZON!
https://www.amazon.com/dp/B0BBRJ2S16
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[I died and was accidentally reborn as an angelic monstrosity, so now I’m building a holy dungeon-tower that is tall enough to reach the gods; so that I can complain about it! But the humans think that I am trying to destroy the world.]
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The senselessness of so much of the world’s death and suffering is made apparent to the dying paladin, Isaiah, in his final moments before he perishes and is, shortly thereafter, reborn into a comparatively quiet and peaceful existence as a simple blackbird.
However, the powerful magic of the god whom Isaiah himself had served in his prior human life upends this latest existence, as a spell goes awry, turning the entity instead into a strange, angelic monstrosity that is neither man nor animal.
Isaiah, desperate to return to its simple life as a blackbird, sets out to build the tallest tower ever seen by the eyes of the world in order to reach the reclusive gods who reside in the heavens above and make them undo the transformation in a bid to allow itself an escape from the complex suffering of intelligent, self-aware mortality.
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[Dungeon-Core] [litRPG] [Base-building]
I would have loved to see the full thing but now I hate what has been done with it
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I can see why this story is rated so high, it has a great beginning and origin story for the MC and lots of nice looking ideas. Sadly everyone in this story acts with the mentality of a demented child. By that I mean often times the thought process of the MC or the actions of everyone around her are just nonsensical. Disney princess movies are more realistic and well thought out then some of the stuff written here. The actions of humans in regards to dungeons for example or the general power balance and relationships between dungeons and humans, it is clear that the author never thought about any of this when writing this story. "Oh I want this to happen" and then it just happens, no "what are the implications behind this or that" all humans and other races and the MC herself are just super low IQ, that is the only explanation that could explain this story.
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After reading about half of the story, it became ridiculously repetitive and lost focus on most of the unique things it had. It was stretched out to much without saying too little, the characters became dull and their interaction became more and more pointless in nature.
The execution of some all powerful hacker like witch was ridiculous as well.
The descriptions that made it cool, have mostly disappeared, and the dungeon which should be the main focus of the story itself, the descriptive corridors and the adventurers going through them have become secondary. The story lost focus, and left it's unique parts in the behind.
The fact that the writer moved it to Amazon and deleted it after finishing it is just the cherry on top. If you write something freely, and the public supports your writing activity by donating, then you are f**king not supposed to delete it after ward.
That is just shameless.
Original comment:
I used to write critical reviews on stories. This would be one too, but I actually have little to no things to criticize about this.
The story gives the exact experience it advertises. It is a very creative and enjoyable read. I love the way the writer creates the dungeon floors. At times you should give a bit more description and let the reader take in the uniqueness of every level like you did at the earlier chapters. Create a few chapters here-and there where you let things calm down and just look around the tower while letting the reader experience the place, through the eyes of the main character.
The floors have a good variety and a nice feeling. The descriptions are mostly proper, and enjoyable to read. The extra information at the start and at the end of almost every chapter is a likable, optional extra. They extend the world's lore and make it appear much wider and bigger than it is at the moment actually is.
I read about half of them, but at times they become a bit boring, since there are ones that were already showcased in the main story, only to appear later again. Then there were multiple ones in a row that spoke about how dungeons are and practically said the same things from different perspectives. I would suggest not writing about the same topic in a row to avoid them becoming monotone, and more skippable.
All in all, I enjoyed reading it, and it made me happy, and excited. The lighthearted humour going on throughout the whole story is also a nice touch, while the story still maintains the seriousness of the certain situation.
Thank you for the experience. I really liked it.
With best regards,
Yokem
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Great story. The grammar is good, and it introduces a lot of creatures from various folklore that I haven't even known. It is also worthy of note that the progress of the story is just right (for me), and the fact that it updates pretty quick for good novels is *chef's kiss*
Would definitely recommend it.
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And it is, in fact, Good.
This story is, very much, a combination of various genres and main themes. It's very Slice of Life, mixed in with LitRPG elements. We follow the story of Isaiah, a devote paladin turned black bird, then dungeon, after gods tried to fix a mistake. First couple chapters are very weird and confusing, but it gets much better and understandable around... chapter 13? Somewhere around there. The beginning is a even mix of LitRPG and Slice of Life, before giving way to a more SOF focused plot in the middle.
The main point of this story is the cast. The cast is vivid, full of different vibrant personalities, tying together a giant cloth of words and emotions. Each character is interweaved with another, forming relationships and rivalries. Some more silly than others. *Cough* Rorate *Cough* Interestingly enough, Isaiah, despite being the MC, is a very rigid character, with rigid personality traits. Merciful, holy, etc.
And, of course, this can't be a Razmatazz book without building up deep emotional connections to fan-favorites, and hopelessly crushing our hopes and dreams. This is especially prevalent in the final chapters were-
*Huh? What do you mean I can't continue? I have to finish reading the script. I don't care if I'm spoiling the damn book, I'm finishing the script. Whoa, hold up! We can talk this out peacefull-*
*Insert credit rolls*
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★★★★☆ [4/5]
Very fun story and lovely character dynamics. There are moments of severe consequences that are usually not in other stories, which is great; but those tend to pop up suddenly and does seem a little out of place after a significant amount of time and trial & error where stuff kinda just works fine? It can be a tad jarring early on, but balances out once the perspective starts covering people and events outside of the dungeon.
The author and community engagement is wonderful as well.
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This has one of the best character development and world building of all the stories I have read till date.
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Yea I don't normally leave reviews, but I gotta say Razz deserves some love for this one. It's good. After dealing with dreams all day at work, it helps uplift me a little.
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Yet another masterpiece from the one and only Razz. Fantastic character development. Even better world building, especially considering all of the lore blurbs at the beginning of each chapter. The MC makes mistakes and learns from them. Actions have consequences here. The struggle is real and it is satisfying when they succeed. You really feel the progression of the MC's intellect as they learn more about the world (again) and experiment with creative ways of building its tower, with plenty of well placed foreshadowing.
Overall, a must-read in my opinion. I look forward to where this story will go in the future.
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i would give it 5 full stars but I can't get the damn thing to fully fill the last star.
i love this story to pieces. Funny characters, interesting twist on the dungeon theme, little lore bytes spread thru the chapters. So much to recommend. Isaiah is an awesome creature and tho he be fictional I still feel like he is real every time I read the novels.
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