An average guy, with an average life, dies while playing an RPG game. Then he opens his eyes again, in a show he had grown up with. Exciting, right? Well, he wasn’t a Saiyan, he was Yamcha, the punching bag of punching bags. But what are these screens above everyone’s heads, showing levels?
Follow his journey as he tries to maneuver himself around the dangerous world of Dragon Ball.
A good and pleasant story. Hard to find anything with this quality about DBZ World, I congratulate the author and hope he continues the story for a long time.
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Hi!! I read your story upto 7 chapters and I have to say something just pulled me in. I don't know how to talk so I'm gonna be direct ok!! Please keep writing this story. And I also wanted to give some suggestions. Utilize it only if you think it's good.
So yamcha as a human cannot be as strong as a Saiyan. But we want yamcha to be stronger gradually. So how do we do this.?
Please put some strrugle where the readers feel like he is overcoming challenges. Not too much effort it should fairly feel like he is cheating a little but not so less that it feels boring.
So when yamcha first fought with Goku we knew Goku was stronger subconsciously. So when yamcha beat Goku that was a positive suprise you need to keep this element in mind and try to do more of it.
The most potential is the gamer system. That system must provide yamcha a way to be stronger than ever before. But he should work seriously for it. Don't do like he trained for a day and wolf fang fist reached level 10. For that you can do some time skips, little ones.
In my opinion the world of DBZ is flawed. I think oh I can't think no more. Just do your best author.
I believe this story has a great potential
Thank u Soo much for this!!
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Among the sea of trash a diamond appears!!!, I usually don't like reading Fanfics due to the usual bad quality but this novel is one of the few outliers.
The characters are all well written and are true to the original. The power ups are well deserved and fit nicely within the story without the need for any plot armor or any "fateful encounter".
The only issue I would have is that the author keeps avoiding the romance in a weird way he should have simply not written it if he was going to tease us every time and needlessly create awkward situations between the characters using the excuse of the staying withing the "original plot".
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Great idea for a fan fiction, looks great for now
Best wishes
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