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Take the most bland cliche villain novels, speed run through it using chinglish grammar then copy and paste random DxD names over people and you got this novel. I like the previous novel but I am very dissappointed with this. I'm sure there are people who may like this but I don't know why you wouldn't choose something else on this site.
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I really liked the idea of the novel i.e. The heroines being able to listen to the voice of the villain and the hero. Normally, this would bring an extreme advantage to the hero and extreme disadvantage to the Villain.
However, here the hero is an extremely lewd kid, yes a powerful but still an immature and rash kid. The villain is someone who has been transmigrated to this story and thus, has awareness that he is inside a novel as a villain. Therefore, he actively (at least in the beginning) tries to distant himself from the plot and the protagonist to live a little longer.
Now, the idea is good but I would say the execution is pretty meh. Instead of saying what is wrong and berate the author for messing up this story, I will provide some suggestions. I am spending so much of my time here because I genuinely want you (the author) to go through these suggestions and improve your story. If you want to discuss the same with me, you can message me directly on scribblehub.
The author shouldn't speed run through different scenarios. I have only read till chapter 11 and there already has been three scenarios and astonishingly, we have already encountered four heroines + one that has not directly interacted with the MC. Please, I suggest you to take it slow. This would be major drawback of this novel and would keep coming up in the other suggestions below.
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It’s an unfortunate reality that this site is plagued by an abundance of absolutely garbage novels that make no attempt to convey a story with any semblance of grammatical competence or coherent train of thought.
Consequently, a new writing style has developed as a direct inverse to lore dumps and excessive prose. One which cuts out normally structured sentences in favor of writing out vague ideas to skip as much storytelling as possible. May I present to you the opposite of show not tell but instead: tell as little as possible! Here’s an example from the summary:
“Seeing the heroines with villain, protagonist angry and vomits blood.”
After reading this line that appears purposely google translated between English and another language then back again, it is not the protagonist that bleeds but, rather; the readers eyes.
I took a peek to check if the summary was just a joke but the first chapter is written entirely in this manner. Sentence structure is atrocious and the story plays out as someone translating, from Chinese to English, a list of facts they want to say in order. This is something I might expect a six year old to write while attempting to mix a pronoun with whatever words they know.
This legitimately deserves 0 stars and I pray that the lord have mercy on your soul.
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Just read the 1st chapter and Im dropping it already. Was expecting Riser changing here from antagonist and escaping his end while the heroine can here his inner voice. But in the end its a generic trash chinese novel then copy-paste names from Highschool DxD. Dont waste your time here
Dont believe those 5 star review. Doesnt even review anything about the novel
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I really liked this novel and I want it to confinue, I really cant say much because there are only 30 chap.
I am enjoying it so I will keep reading
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I love these type of stories. Keep up the good work!
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