Grammar: 1/5 – Too many grammar issues for me to even bother listing them all. It's clear that the author didn't even bother to use a text editor with a dictionary support. This is just sloppy.
Writing style: 3/5 – This part is not terrible, but neither it is outstanding. It's not hard to follow the oftentimes quick paced events, but this is dragged down by the bad grammar, which does make it harder for the writing to be smooth to read. The bad part here is the rather primitive sounding dialogue between characters.
Characters: 3/5 – The characters have individuality and personality. They seem to be somewhat simple, but mostly act with reason. The MC is especially simple-minded.
World building: 4/5 – Somewhat interesting and immersing. The world is coherent, and expansive, but it feels like there are some parts that might not work long term.

The story and the world are the strong points of this novel. Unfortunately, they are really dragged down by the other parts.

Overall 3/5. Doesn't qualify for anything more than that.

Dropped.

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Zenomew

Status: ii 53 – chaos first child

Jun 15, 2024

I really liked the concept and world building of the story although the grammar needs some work

I really liked the fact that there are many characters from different nationalities... and I had an idea why not include monsters from different nationalities in our world you know like there are genies from Middle East, elfs in England, kitsune (magic foxes) in japan

Also I feel that the monsters are too two dimensional creatures that see to know only how to attack and defend

There can be monsters that are friendly to humans or just not agressive, some can be tricksters like a monkey that will steal our stuff or something like that

Overall it's a good story which needs a bit of work

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