A man is at the end of his life. You could say that its no one's fault but his own. You could say it's fate. He would say its both. If there is anything he could have it would be the chance to fix the fate of those close to him. Fate has its own plans. He finds himself in a situation where he struggles to even believe it's even real. Is It real?
This is my first attempt at writing so please be patient with me. The cover photo is not mine. I will add tags as they become relevant. I'm half just winging it with the story. Its possible inconsistencies in the story may arise since it's not all written out. Thank you for reading.
Warning.
[spoiler]The prologue is basically the MC killing himself. The story involves some torture involving physical and mental abuse with sleep depravation that starts at Chapter 9 and continues for a few chapters. There will most likely be more scenes of this nature in the future. There are also shocking scenes described from the MC's childhood that are not meant to be arousing. I do not condone the abuse of children in any way, shape or form, but it is a part of the story.[/spoiler] (sigh) I tried at least. This is for the people that didn't read the tags.
I appreciate any and all feed back. I'm also curious as to why the 1 star rating's? I wish you would say why :/ but I know the story wont be everyone's favorite cup of tea.
Oh, and one more thing. If it's not clear by now, If you are looking for a story that is all sunshine and rainbows you've come to the wrong place.
Truly, amazing novel so far. I am honestly suprised. Writing isn't bad and the story of Yuna and Faye made me cry twice!
I can't wait for new chapters.
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TLDR: It's not very good slavery / torture porn. My guess even if you're into that it's at best a 4 if not it's a negative number
Writing : 3/5 The words are correct and the flow is OK, but there's no charm or hook. Flat is the adjective that comes to mind
Plot: 1/5 REPEAT: MC does something stupid without thinking about it and bad things happen to him ; UNTIL (DONE READING) ; There's your plot
Characters: 2/5 The MC is pathetic and whiny, the rest are generic. I Was surprised, there wasn't one of the villains twisting their waxed mustache while foreclosing on orphanage run by nuns who had taken a vow of Poverty
World Building: 2/5 Well it's got magical slavery. It's something of an immersion breaker for me. I just don't see how that manages to have any kind of functional society
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It's good, that's all I can say for the people who like having the MC experience pain often. Not in every chapter but it's there, though kind of sad that the story went to hiatus, cause the author is somewhat "dead" in this website.
Honestly if he/she came back and updated the story, I'll be here all day binging it.
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