The story premise looks nice the story is heading a nice direction as well but the MC is portrayed as a mentally ill child, intentional or not I dont know?

Spoiler

The MC gets stuck in an unknown world and becomes careless and gets caught so they can do experiments on her, she escapes somehow by luck noone was watching her or the building she was in.. next she talks to her goddess and instead of asking for help or normal questions she throws a tantrum like a child.. after she escaped from her captors she spends 2 days playing with a RC car and a caterpillar that she finds cute and wants to pet all the while rambling nonsense in her mind about useless stuff and "memes" meanwhile her captors are looking for her.. then she gets a plot armor gift from the goddess and the MC spends a whole chapter on rambling internal thoughts like a mentally ill child. I could barely read through it

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Note despite my complains I enjoy the story because I love succubi but the mental ramblings are serieusly offputting and annoying

One example

I can't help but 'Squee!' out loud, but... quietly. A soft squee of glee, mind ye! Ahem. Where was i? Ah yes. Magic Basics! Tutorials! Excite, Much, Very. Enough memes it seems my dream is real so I no longer feel so tragic, now onto the MAGIC!

That was a hard rhyme ok. Don't you shake your head at me, yes you, I see you. Erm, actually forget that. I didn't say anything. We were practicing magic! Yes! Exactly!

Here another:

'Since when were you careful since you got here?' my brain retorts to me immediately. Ok, sure, you got me brain, you're right, I'm a bumbling idiot, but you're the one controlling me so it's your job to not be dumb! Are you happy now? That's what I thought. Now we both just feel bad. Meanie.

As for you, yes you, reader! Don't say a word. I know I'm dumb, and I'm not talking to myself, you are. Pffffft~~! K.O. 4th Wall In my imagination a chibi version of myself punches through a small brick wall, collapsing it. 'Ok, Lilith, ' I think to myself, 'enough talking to your imaginary audience ok? FOCUS!'

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