HUH?! What's this? AN actual quality fanfic? Side characters in the canon finally getting the limelight instead of the usual cardboard hAREM lemon treatment?

*squints at author*.. Oi you. You're gonna finish this masterpiece right? *Pumps sawed off shotgun* RIGHT?

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Soul_Sin

Status: adventures of jackie chan and...

Nov 13, 2021

I love it. Simply splendid. This is a great My Hero Academia fanfiction, and I look forward to more in the future.

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Orion4144

Status: pillow talk

Oct 21, 2021

Great MHA fanfic, has that law and order vide a mix of Deadpool. You can definitely relax will reading this fanfic.

Since this story is a early publish I'm not going to comment on Grammer because that can be edited later.

The 'flow' of the story was so-so in the start but got better and better later on.

The main character is well designed, although some of the interactions could be considered robotic, I think that he is cool.

Yes, so my review is gonna be a 5, I would like to thank Gonshido for publishing this on SH and really really really hope it goes far. :)

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WriterBastard

Status: president and vigilante. again.

Jan 16, 2022

Strangely good. That’s all I can really say

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ObserverEnthusiast

Status: president and vigilante

Jan 14, 2022

Totally recommend this??????????????

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RedSprite

Status: kaina’s lament.

Jan 12, 2022

I absolutely recomend it, I think this novel is amazing, I was not expecting that.

I saw the poorly photoshopped cover, I saw the words "GTA San Andreas System" and my first thought was "OH, this is going to be a really funny TRAINWRECK of a novel, isn't it?" But no, its actually really well writen if a bit zanny at times, sometimes it takes really weird directions but there's no hesitation at all and its all played straight in a way. All the characters have their own motivations and lives outside the MC and are just perfectly in character with their manga personalities.

The reason im giving it only 4 stars its becouse of the second to last arc (from current date chapters) was really bad, not becouse I have a problem that series in particulary was extra goofy or something but becouse it was mostly left unchanged the whole way without much involment of the old characters, which is boring, except for maybe the antagonist, he had some changes and he was really well writen and probably the best part of that arc, then at the end when spoilers

Spoiler

a suposed quirkless guy gains a quirk, I have no idea if im supposed to take it seriously or not becouse the character is a full on comedic character, but he has a shonen type power up that's both really weird and also played so straight its almost "edgy" in a way, which is not a word I would describe that series as at all, then 5 other "OC's donut steel"s appear and they're just as out of place as that arc ending power up scene

[collapse]

It got better after that arc and so far there's some new intrigue going on, seems cool, the only other problem is that during and after that last arc I felt the novel was a bit aimless, its not the end of the world tho, i'll keep reading.

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Onggho17

Status: c100

Mar 21, 2022

From the early chapter I already see the inexperience, let's list them :

-too focused on training montage rather than the plot (MC relationship with Fuyumi in early chapter)

-we don't care what you are doing with your muscle, why not explore your system or write more about world building

-the plot is too fast / forced and the reasoning behind them is dumb af (Muscular almost die by kitchen Knife, can you imagine?)

-MC is boring, we don't need another Deku. Makes something interesting for fck sake.

-MC feel guilty coz his GF stopping him doing hero while being quirkless, I bet watching Crime News is a torture for him.

-too much technical bullsht & plothole (watching TV 2x speed = perception training, yes another training montage with 0 logic)

-even when canon starts kick in he basically just tag-along (Jesus, do something usefull !!!)

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dahoosa

Status: the rally

Jan 20, 2022

Grammar is choppy, but the plot, dialogue, humor, and other aspects are very good. Enjoyable reading :D

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LollipoPReapeR

Status: skinny duo and step-up.

Oct 6, 2023

Interesting concept and cool powers but execution is lacking. I keep being told it’ll get better but unfortunately I don’t think I have the patience to last that long. As of now, author seems to have a decent idea on what he wants to happen, but the problem is that those wishes are not conveyed in a natural manner. This results in an MC that acts strangely and misses nuance. Character interactions could use more depth and funnily, MC comes across as more stilted than other characters as he doesn’t seem to be very consistent.

Author could also work a bit more technical aspects like how conversations are written and fleshing out the story more. Personal pet peeve of mine is also seeing canon characters/events pop up in front of the MC randomly without MC making some sort of effort to seek them out or something else that is plausible.

If this is given a good rewrite with help from an editor or ChatGPT, since author must have gained experience from this, it can easily go up another star at least I reckon.

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SaucyHug

Status: shido vs. nrg.

Mar 6, 2022

I love how this fanfic doesn't butcher its original and creates a fun separate but familiar story line.

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