2) executed the concept a bit too humourously and not serious enough (*not saying it needs to be edgy but author played it off like hero is a wimp/doormat. At least slap the bimbo in the face once for f**ks sake)
3) Hero is actually smart, cunning but he almost doesn't seem to express any proper rage or anger with enough of it in said situations with enough gravitas
4) He does seem to get strong pretty fast by chap 10 he's already lvl100 in a very short amount of time though I do hope he keeps that momentum and speed of growth or it'll turn into an overdramatic soap opera/action/fantasy CHIMERA story.
Overall good but mistakes in grammar and execution of character is too 2d but I hope more chapters will fix that since it's only been 11 chaps.
I wish you best of luck author and try to get a beta-reader or proofreader for the grammar mistakes. Also try posting this on other webnovel website like (WEBNOVEL, ROYAL ROAD etc). This story has great potential.
I didn't notice any problems with the grammar or syntax. The style and plot of the novel is at the level of the title. Probably good for a 14-15 years old boy? Anyway not my type. Still, I will leave three stars since is just not my type of novel but well written
1) Good concept
2) executed the concept a bit too humourously and not serious enough (*not saying it needs to be edgy but author played it off like hero is a wimp/doormat. At least slap the bimbo in the face once for f**ks sake)
3) Hero is actually smart, cunning but he almost doesn't seem to express any proper rage or anger with enough of it in said situations with enough gravitas
4) He does seem to get strong pretty fast by chap 10 he's already lvl100 in a very short amount of time though I do hope he keeps that momentum and speed of growth or it'll turn into an overdramatic soap opera/action/fantasy CHIMERA story.
Overall good but mistakes in grammar and execution of character is too 2d but I hope more chapters will fix that since it's only been 11 chaps.
I wish you best of luck author and try to get a beta-reader or proofreader for the grammar mistakes. Also try posting this on other webnovel website like (WEBNOVEL, ROYAL ROAD etc). This story has great potential.
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I didn't notice any problems with the grammar or syntax. The style and plot of the novel is at the level of the title. Probably good for a 14-15 years old boy? Anyway not my type. Still, I will leave three stars since is just not my type of novel but well written
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