The story and writing have been pretty decent so far. Avoids some of the major tropes we see in such stories where the MC becomes OP really quickly. Certain side plots haven't quite panned out or were dropped seemingly pretty quickly such as the step mother and half brother. Perhaps enhance the plot here, introduce relatives from all sides paternal and maternal.
The father's character is too one dimensional as well where he is always stern and buried in paperwork. The author really should avoid character tropes here. Rich and powerful people delegate. A CEO and president isn't buried in paperwork like Japanese anime suggests. They socialize and mingle to increase their standing and engage in politics through courts, balls, and parties.
The MC's personality is also a bit weird where she sometimes acts as a child and sometimes an adult seeking attention and validation. This seems inconsistent so author needs to address this. Perhaps clarity on MC past?
World building so far is slow and steady which isn't bad, plus I like the whole show and not tell approach thus far.
So far been happy with story despite the minor flaws. Hopefully author keeps the pacing right and avoids expositions or slowing the story plot pacing to that of paint drying.
Pain and loss make us better and stronger people. This is the story of a superhero who started from a broken home and found more. When your powers came from a notorious super villain, does that fact define your future? Who you are?
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I was always told your entire life flashes before your eyes at this moment. Instead, I dreamt of another world, a world filled with magic! But what I am becoming in that world is a thing of nightmares.
Everything was going well for him: a well-earning job, a car, a home, but then he was tossed into a world of immortals, in the body of Jade Beauty of all things!
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Hello, there. I’d written this novel a while back
The story and writing have been pretty decent so far. Avoids some of the major tropes we see in such stories where the MC becomes OP really quickly. Certain side plots haven't quite panned out or were dropped seemingly pretty quickly such as the step mother and half brother. Perhaps enhance the plot here, introduce relatives from all sides paternal and maternal.
The father's character is too one dimensional as well where he is always stern and buried in paperwork. The author really should avoid character tropes here. Rich and powerful people delegate. A CEO and president isn't buried in paperwork like Japanese anime suggests. They socialize and mingle to increase their standing and engage in politics through courts, balls, and parties.
The MC's personality is also a bit weird where she sometimes acts as a child and sometimes an adult seeking attention and validation. This seems inconsistent so author needs to address this. Perhaps clarity on MC past?
World building so far is slow and steady which isn't bad, plus I like the whole show and not tell approach thus far.
So far been happy with story despite the minor flaws. Hopefully author keeps the pacing right and avoids expositions or slowing the story plot pacing to that of paint drying.
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