The writing is very stilted and lacking in depth or expressiveness, even for a work that has been translated or written by an English language learner.

But I think the biggest thing for me is that I can get a story that has a character who is mean and grows over time. I can deal with a protagonist who has everything fall in line for them luck or ability wise. I just can't get behind unrealistic reactions and interactions between characters, or conversations that read like a self-indulgent daydream with an anime character. Heck, even the intentional cruelty or "teasing" reads like it is an AI imagining what a cliched character without a personality might do to tease a poster or figurine as practice for a real conversation they'd never have. The only thing that feels real about the protagonist is the unintended cruelty towards others implied by their actions - something I question if the author meant to write in at all, given how frequently other characters ignore or even embrace it.

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jacobpaige

Status: c22: Cheating the system?

Mar 6, 2024

So. Many. Plot holes. They start off relatively small, but they just get bigger and bigger until you can't ignore them anymore. The MC is an introvert with extreme social anxiety, which is good, because when she manages to overcome that, she's an a**hole. Plus, she doesn't have to work for anything as meat pies continuously fall from the sky. I'm also not a fan of the writing which frequently feels stilted and unnatural, like a poorly done translation. Overall, I just have a hard time finding anything to actually like about this series.

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Milanda

Status: cheating the system?

Mar 1, 2024

So, this story has no reviews up and I figured I would post one for those considering reading it. I'll try not to give major spoilers without the spoiler tag though.
Overall: [4/5]
Style: [5/5]. I really like Invayne's writing style and would suggest it to others.
Story: [5/5] The storyline is fascinating and stepping away from the characters I'm intrigued. While fairly trope ridden, It's not a bad thing. If you enjoy system apocalypse style stories with MC's who have foreknowledge and prep time, you'll adore this. We also see some solid world building even early on. More importantly..

Spoiler

Zoe actually is going the distance and putting in the work rather then half-assing it like a lot of MC's. We see hints of her plans and goals and Its a great touch to this story.

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Character: [3/5] Zoe is honestly the biggest flaw to the story, but not on her own. She's a fascinating character when not interacting with other people.

Spoiler

Zoe's story has depth we haven't uncovered on why she has problems talking to 'real' people, but her interactions with real people is grating. Especially since she refers to some people as things and seems honestly confused they have actual names. I'm also a bit leery she's going to fake a disability (being Mute) rather then just admit anxiety as a reason for writing over talking.

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The caveat is, as she's 'normal' around NPC's, those interactions are much smoother and enjoyable. So I'm hoping in time we get a more enjoyable Zoe.
Grammar: [3/5] Typo's and Error's are pretty common place. Pretty basic 'Ran it through a spellchecker and it fubar'd a few words' vibe through every chapter. It's not bad, but regular enough to be noted. That said considering how many storys Invayne is writing on a consistent basis; it's a bit more excusable.

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