Need more chapters need more chapters. Appreciate this novel! Carry on

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One of the best story I read here. MC is smart and not beta like some of the other novels. MC will kill and control others for his goals, but is kind to his people. 

Cons:  

Cheat abit too OP

MC collecting girls but still cant have s*x due to bullsh*t reason author gave.

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The story is quite nice, though I feel like it's going too slow, in a sense of timespan: even though many things are happening and the progress is fast, they are all crammed together, barely giving the MC time to rest and interact with the harem; considering the timeline the author gave for the events to come, cramming so many things in a single week of constant activity makes me feel like it will take forever to reach "the reckoning, " even if the author has been hinting that since MC came back, many events are happening sooner than in his previous timeline.

I think just a single paragraph once in a while saying he spent the day off relaxing would be better than how it is currently, and he does have two months of time before school starts.

NTR: it's not present. It baffles me how there are people who consider it as such, when the MC clearly hates his fianceé. There's nothing to steal when he doesn't even consider her as "his."

The author does listen to feedback, typo reports and responds to people's questions; a big plus.

The big minus is the grammar, because of which I chose to give three stars instead of four.

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I like that there is a  lot of emphasis on story, but on the side there's harem as well. Looking forward to how story progress. 

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Good, but could be better. 

Despite having a slow pace (in a matter of time, a few days have passed, but it's almost chapter 100...), but the story itself is quite hectic (a lot going on), which makes the pace of the story very interesting. Overall it has a lot of potential, although I have no idea how many heroines there will be, at least until the current chapter it seems to be raining and there are harbingers of more. Good luck managing this author.

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I have spent most of my life reading literature. I have a condition known as hyperlexia, which means I have a innate talent for pattern recognition, especially when it comes to literacy.

(I am going somewhere with this, don’t worry)

I’ve been reading since I was between two and three. I have a reading speed far greater than most people, and I have read a goddamn lot. The amount I have read could literally fill multiple libraries, and I can recall most of what I read to a high degree of accuracy even years after I read it.

So when I say that this story is one of the laziest, poorly concieved, offensive, and downright amateur pieces of fiction I have ever seen...

... yeah, I more than have the qualifications to say that, more than some people with degrees in literature studies. 

To start with, this story is little more than a power fantasy that reads like it was written by a twelve year old. Character dialogue is flat and uninspired. Antagonists act like they came right out of a primary school bully factory. Almost everyone is either an unlikable edgelord or so painfully bland that they make growing grass look interesting by comparison. The main character is set up as having some sort of master plan, but that master plan is predicated on so many assumptions and deus ex machinas that it feels more like the protagonist read his own fic instead of coming from the future. There is no sense of tension, the audience knows he’ll win 100% of the time, and his character is paradoxically both the blandest and edgiest of all of the cast.

Most concerningly, this story has a disturbingly buggered idea of gender politics that makes me seriously worry about the mental health of the author. I cannot describe how ass-backwards this story is when it comes to the female characters, who are either s*x slaves, transplanted villainess characters from the most generic of eroge, or so utterly lacking in character than when the main character engages with them it feels more like a guy sweet talking his inflatable s*x doll. A doll with the face surgically removed with a chainsaw and more puncture repairs than unblemished polymer. 

Then there’s the premise.

My god, it’s like Redo of Healer had a ugly lovechild with Sword Art Online, and the resulting lovechild was born deformed and missing pieces. And then that child grew up to become part of a drunken, partly incestual threesome with SAO (again!) and Fifty Shades of Grey. And then resulting orgy resulted in this story. 

This story feels like every bad isekai trope condensed into a single painfully boring narrative that is more concerned with making the main character so utterly amazing that he might as well become a divine entity and just have all of the characters line up eagerly to suck him off. 

It’s juvenile in a way that makes me shocked that this story not only managed to get any attention, but become the most viewed story in the martial arts category. 

If there is one redeeming quality that I can ascribe to this hot mess of a preteen’s attempt at writing a novel, at least it isn’t nearly as bad as it could be. There is a whole world of bad stories online that this story manages to rise above, and no, My Immortal is only one of those.

So, yeah, best praise I can give? At least this isn’t as bad as My Immortal.

That’s hardly a high bar, and it’s not exactly an achievement.

2/5, and that’s me being generous. I was tempted to give it a fat nothing, but I’m in a good mood, so there you go. 

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While the premise is good and plot seems to be interesting, the overall quality of this novel is being brought down by some major grammar mistakes and in general it would greatly benefit from some basic proof reading.

Regardless of how good the novel is, something like that kept me bothering more and more, which is why I've decided to drop it after around 40 chapters.

As I said before, the idea is good, but if you are going to write a novel, at least proof read it and fix some of the glaring mistakes before publishing it, regardless whether you aim to be professional writer or keep it only as a hobby.

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Review as of 30/8/2023 and may contain spoilers so don't press read more

I basically wrote a review to know a novel like this on this website and please tell me if you know one cause I only found this one worthy and good enough to read. 

First of all my most fav characters excluding victor

1. Margret 

Man I just love her character, it's so well written by the author as every 4/5 people in the novel hate Margret and call her slut, bitch etc etc but most of the readers love her. Her character is so unique for example 

her character is a type I don't see in many novels, or even if it is there they fail to show its potential, where as Margret's character makes the readers want to see her in more scenes than other harem girls.

One more interesting thing is that she has a very good sense of humour and can understand the humour of victor easily and she understands things very quickly which innocent or normal girls rather don't, well all thanks to her might slutty aura

2. Alex 

Once again a character written uniquely. A reverse trap or so I heard someone say it's called. Her interactions with Margret make me laugh most of the time and how she plans to take revenge on Margret but fears that that slut will do something more perverted if given a chance. And how she wants to love Vic but stops and how he knows and loves her and makes fun of her. She really is a funny character.

3. Alpha

From taking revenge -to being a subordinate -to finding victor interesting -to managing most of his work -to starting to fall for him -to missing him and yearning for him in her last moments -to finding him cute when she gets (thinks) powerful than him -to getting spanked her ass back to reality -to coming to love him. Her character has really developed all a lot. Her character is more like queen Medusa and is very likable.

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So, I started reading this story and I wasn't too impressed.  By chapter 30, I was ready to throw in the towel, so I gave the story 2* and wrote a rather critical review.

But I figured I'd give it a few more chapters before I abandoned it completely.

And I am glad that I did.

The story is not great, but it is very entertaining and occasionally hilarious.  Some of the joke fall flat and others are beaten like a dead horse, but there is a lot of imagination and creativity in the plot and characters.

So I recommend this story.  Its not high quality literature, but it should provide hours of entertainment, which is more like most stories can do.

Original Review @ Chapter 30

There are some stories that are so bad that they are hilariously good.

Unfortunately, this story isn't one of those.

The author seems incapable of making characters who aren't caricatures.  It's like walking through a fun house and watching as your images are warped out of shape by the twisted mirrors.

The MC is dumb as a rock and wouldn't know subtlety or cunning if it bit him on the ass.

I'm hoping the story gets better - if it does, I'll change the review.  But I'm not very hopeful that that will occur.

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