This novel is not well written. First issue: GRAMMAR MISTAKES EVERYWHERE including, but not limited to: constant tense changes causing the flow of the story to halt, misspellings in nearly every sentence, and several other things. Second issue: polls being used for no important reason. Third issue: the system needs to be dramatically altered to fit the general idea of the story. 

Read More

As of chapter 8, the grammar has been good, pacing is good and world building (as much as it has been so far) is good. The base for the plot has also been interesting. Then comes the part why only 3 stars:

The characters are inconsistent: the MC is supposed to be smart for her age and more mature than others, but comes out as a total simpleton. The MC is also supposedly forgotten everything about her past life, but knows some things she's not supposed to.

The system makes absolutely no sense, with MC gaining jobs with skills and bonuses from doing things once and apparently people have no limit on many jobs they can have; so why is it that people don't have a thousand active jobs?

All in all, it had a promising start, but didn't deliver enough for me to read long enough to reach the first smut.

PS. The Author seems to be a fun person though

Read More

Up until now the story does not have much in p*rn but more than makes up to it by giving a nice plot. So you can't expect this to relieve yourself s*xually. At lease not yet. At the beginning only expect the non-s*xual tags to represent most of the story. The character descriptions and world building is done nicely. The story isn't exactly lighthearted but it isn't tragic either.

Author's poles doesn't not seem relevant (far too extreme) to the current plot development, but I find that out of placeness quite amusing. Looking forward to see how the story progresses both with p*rn and plot. I will update this review as the story progresses.

Read More

Very good story prota is lewd and not ashamed of it she strong and she's learning fast the plot so far sound good should give it a try and F"@& morales x)

Read More

The plot progression and characters are quite good- it's just not exactly to my preference, at least not fully since I'm someone who prefers either completely (or at least mostly) dark stories or the opposite, not something somewhat halfway.

Still quite good though.

Read More

The author has promise, and clearly struggles/struggled (I'm only on c18) with past tense, which is fine. If they go back and fix all the "would have" "would be", etc., then it'd be a fun read. 3/5, -1.5 for grammar, -.5 for toeing the line (you know what I mean boyo). I'll keep reading, but would have painful time with grammar. ;P

Read More