The plot itself and the ideas the author has are good, but it is let down by the appalling English, to the point where as interested as I am in finding out how this story might end I cannot continue with how difficult it is to read. The "choice  system" is also a bit broken, often the choice is binary between something good/obvious and bad/don't do it. If you can put up with the writing quality you might enjoy this, but I no longer can.

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please leave this story only in the world of harry potter. 

I don't care if he gets powers from other worlds of fiction, but he doesn't want to go to other worlds to increase his harem, there are already many stories like that out there and I don't want this to become another copy of it. 

I'm really enjoying the story so far (c46) keep up the good work.

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This is a OP protagonist lemon-harem story. It correctly identifies Potter and Weasley as overconfident misled hero-wannabe morons, Hermoine as an academic with more loyalty and plot-armor than real-world good sense, and Dumbledore as a manipulative plotter at best (arguably sociopathic villain). It has fun with the fact that the Harry Potter world is absolutely hypocritically duplicitous, power-driven and unbalanced.  I think the story does a good job with Potter wish-fulfillment including magical creature empowerment, but could benefit by toning down the harem elements (only a select few want to read a story where over half the action is harem management and repetitious smut). Author seems not to be a native english speaker, which might bother some, but the story is not difficult to read or follow (better than I could produce in any second language).  Keep with this writing author!!!

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The autor barely writes english, not comparable to machine translations but its close. The MC is uninteresting he is a villain for the sake of It, you can do that but at least make it fun to read, for us to wish to praise his intelect and how he makes everyone a fool. The autor also express that eventually the MC will need to leave HP world when the title of the book makes this universe the main point of this story.

 The story is a sequence of narrations about whats the MC is doing, but mostly is not descriptive enough to makes us care about whats is happening (basically x happening and them y and after that z and the MC gets another girl that for some reason think he is worth it when he barely shows he wants to be with the girl before most (If not all) of them take the initiative. Barely any dialog for a story full or relationship that for sure would have some drama. Anyway, kinda weak plot.

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This "choice system" was just a bullsh*t.

Its not really a choice, if only given two option, and the other one result in penalties. Or, even if there are more option, the other option doesn't really matter. Or, even if given many "good" option, MC can just easily do all of them. Or, even without choice from system, its an obvious thing that MC would do anyways.

So yeah, it's not a "choice system" if there is only one obvious option.

And the "villain" thing was also weird. MC (& maybe the author?) were really obsessed about this villain thing, even though what he really do is just what a normal people do as well.  And he is not even that good about it. Most of it feel like a gimmick.

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I did read this far so it doesnt deserve a 1 star, its got something to it.

The book had an interesting concept, that basically got thrown out the window because our MC is smarter than the system, smarter than everyone in his surroundings, basically he's just super smart. <-90% of the chapters rant about how smart he is. The girls are basically trophies he's collecting just to have a collection of girls, but every few chapters he would say he treats them right, he hardly talks to anyone in his harem basically just giving them orders and manipulating them then anyone who isn't infatuated with him he has a small monologue about they can make their own choices but that they're wrong in not choosing him. Tbh I saw very similar monolgues from a documentary about a serial killer before. What finally made me lose interest was the first lemon scene...I won't go into it.

TLDR: MC is a typical psychopath who believes he's owed the world, treats women as trophies he can buy or manipulate and somehow believes it's for everyone's own good that he does.

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This book is annoying and almost painful to read. The formatting is terrible, and the villain system is set up to force him to make stupid decisions.

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I personally think I have low standards when it comes to reading webnovels and fanfics, that the content is readable and comprehensible even with bad grammar (because I myself dont know if my grammar is correct or good), but this one is hard to read and comprehend (to me).

I haven't read very far, obviously, but from what I read so far the premise seems to have potential to be good, I would've personally continued to read but won't as I stated, hard to read and understand for me.

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quite promising but a bit boring because of the slow plot and the MC who is still underage. I really hope netori in this story

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