By Master4thWall
[R-18, Mature Element Warning!] [Multiverse!]
A young man with a questionable job dies, eaten by a shark. To his surprise, afterlife was a spinning roulette that decided his next world and powers, with an annoyed Goddess supervising the pro
great story! Love the slice of life and the soft core bits in the beginning
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This is my first review on this site, so I apologize if it's lacking in any way.
It's a decent story with a great premise, it severe editing though. Grammar, spelling, format (the author says so themselves in a comment) and most of all consistency need to be improved.
1) the main character lost his clothing in a fight against opponent, and suddenly everyone acted as if he was miraculously dressed again
2) previously discussed important points are rediscussed during later conversations as if the previous conversation had never happened
3) the entire story (up to where I stopped) is formatted for web novel, the author never went back and fixed this issue and even as end of chapter announcements from the webnovel version
Overall, I think this is a decent story with great potential, just needs a little bit of work to smooth out the rough spots.
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