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It's very rough.
The very basics of the set up could work. Unfortunately it's very cluttered with lots of extra, and unnecessary things.
There is a cludged in system for... some reason. It's some offshoot of the 'choice maker' system, oh and there's quests too?
The MC is now the leader of a super powerful organization... so any tension is now gone.
Basically, the idea isn't bad? The characters could be okay... but hardly worth the time to read even as short as it is.
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The concept sounds really good but the execution fails in many places. For some reason the author uses this weird system of dashes and << >> symbols to denote dialogue but randomly changes which they're using and sometimes forgets them entirely. The dialogue itself is also pretty poorly written which, along with the confusing symbols, makes it incredibly difficult to follow a conversation. The entire thing is also packed full of grammatical errors which just compounds on everything else. If this got an editor it would easily go to 4 or 5 stars for me.
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