The writing in this as of the first few chapters is fairly bad. Each sentence is very poorly thought out and reads like bullets in a PowerPoint. None of the story comes organically and is sort of info. Dumped instead of presented in any sort of dynamic way.
I had a long day.
I was tired, so I went to bed.
Then fell asleep quickly.
I woke up the next day.
I felt well rested.
It just doesn't flow, like at all. It has oodles of simple sentences and very little character developement. On the plus side I did get the feeling that the writer knew quite a bit about Star Wars and enjoyed writing it. Just maybe not so much for others to enjoy reading as for a sort of organized daydream.
When an average working man in his thirties gets fired, he receives a strange E-Mail.
He happens to play YGO in his downtime and the E-Mail looks to be about a new YGO game.
He registers and thinks nothing of it.
Unknown to him,
In a universe where some civilizations thrive and others struggle to survive, a hunger for power and dominance has long driven the Manskligs, or humans. But when their reckless pursuit of progress leads to their inevitable downfall, their xenogeni
The writing in this as of the first few chapters is fairly bad. Each sentence is very poorly thought out and reads like bullets in a PowerPoint. None of the story comes organically and is sort of info. Dumped instead of presented in any sort of dynamic way.
I had a long day.
I was tired, so I went to bed.
Then fell asleep quickly.
I woke up the next day.
I felt well rested.
It just doesn't flow, like at all. It has oodles of simple sentences and very little character developement. On the plus side I did get the feeling that the writer knew quite a bit about Star Wars and enjoyed writing it. Just maybe not so much for others to enjoy reading as for a sort of organized daydream.
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