By Edenstone47
Aila has been sick for most of her life, but near the moment of her death, a gray mist filled her room, and she disappeared from Earth altogether.
Aila appears in a ruin upon Imera, the living planet, a world where people can channel the na
Edit: This is now outdated. The writer really did a big face lift on this one and even edited the old chapters. It seems they just needed the right tools. It seems pretty promising though I will say that the premise might be a bit overused or raw for some if this gets popular enough for a publication route after some professional editing.
That said I'll leave my old review below if just for the sake of clarity.
Old review;
It's really rough syntax wise with the grammar, spelling, and formatting just being bad. The chapter length is also far too short at about five or six-minute reads, but it has a lot of potential if the writer puts in the work to edit this up and rewrite it. It has a good premise and that makes it interesting. With that, I give this a preliminary five-star review. Keep at it, writer! You can do it. 😁
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