Mark dies in an alleyway, stabbed to death by a gangster whilst being recorded, as a high school student. As he lays on the ground, he thought, 'I expected death to be a lot more quiet and dark. I can still hear the cars driving by. Guess humans were wrong about the afterli-'. His thoughts gets interrupted. Then he hears, "Yes, you mortals were wrong about the afterlife. Now, welcome, young one, to your after-death therapy session."
'What the f*ck'
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This is my first time writing so please don't get your hopes up. Don't expect too much world building, character development etc. I wrote this story because I had a random idea that seemed good in my head. Criticism is welcome and I will try my best to act on it.
Chapter releases will be irregular.
This is a fictional work, any names of people that you may know is purely coincidental. Any information I provide in this novel is highly likely to be incorrect, so take it with a pinch of salt.
The cover image is AI generated using Holara.
Previous name was 'The Swordswoman's Tale'.
I was curious if I could post review with nothing on it and you can but now I can't remove this Oh well. As the author said in the description of this story it's his first work and it shows.
But it is decently entertain if nothing amazingly high-quality and most of stuff on the site is of questionable quality anyways
so should you read this story? the answer to that question is... I have no idea
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The Female Swordsman's (but sometimes Gunslinger's) and her cast of split personalities' 5 Minute Walk to Being OP.1) So much randomness. VR and guns in fantasy, split personalities... just why? "Yeah this world is ahead in some stuff and behind at other stuff" is neither good explanation or engaging worldbuilding. Feels like you throw any stuff you could think of in the story without any reason whatsoever.2) Just tropes. Isekai'd man with tragic backstory gets OP cheats, is almost immediately unbeatable, meets some chaff just 3.5 steps out of his cheat home, destroys it and saves some ladies (any of them royalty yet?) without breaking a sweat. Ladies in awe of her power so much they pass out just from mentioning her own sword style, MC finds special weapon in a random shop for a few pennies, goes to guild and gets S rank immediately. Split personalities for making internal dialogues included.3) Too convenient. Learning swordsmanship, magic and all those pretty skills even at x1000 speed would have taken a lot longer than a few days (which would have been both Swordsman-ish and Journey-ish). MC adjusts to anything and everything (being reborn, beign a girl, killing etc.) too fast and too easy. Stats say she can lift only 10 kg, but she swings her sword easily, cuts with it and takes another person's swing on her sword. I am not believing that being 10 kg power, nope. There is so little worldbuilding, challenge, conflict and actual plot that it is not engaging. Probably good as a first-time writing, but not exactly something for readers to look forwards to. Thank you for you trying though, hope you would not feel too personal for my review and would be able to git gud (if you want to, of course).
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